Some people consider price to be the most important factor when buying a product or service. Do you agree or disagree?
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Currently, some people claim that humanshuman have a fundamental right to access clean watera basic right which is accessing clean water, thus every home should be provided with free water. I disagree with this measure as I believe that the governments or society providing free water for everyone may lead to several problems, including wasting water and increasing governments' financial pressureimproving governments’ economic stress.
The first reason is that it may result in wasting water. This is because, if governments provideif providing free water for every home, many people may notwill may not pay attention to water consumption and lack awareness of water conservation. For example, many people may increase unnecessary the frequency of showersshower times and take more time to shower. This behaviour can lead to unnecessary waste. As a result, providingsupporting free water for everyone can increase unnecessary public water consumptionsocial unnecessary demand of water and may result in a shortage of water in industry.
Another issuecause is that this measure can lead to government economic pressure growth. If the government wantsIf government wants to provide free water to everyone, they will need to increase investmentinvesting in many items such as water pipestubes, factories and staff and governments will lose water tariff revenuesincome of water. Then, those investments may lead to the government need to reduce assistance to other basic public services such as education, public transportation and medicine. Thus, this measure may mean that residentslead to that residents have to pay more money for other basic services and facilities.
In conclusion, I disagree that every home should be supplied with free watersupported by water which is free since this plan also has many negative effects. For instance, it can result in wasting water and increasing governments’ economic stress. Therefore, I oppose this idea.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is organized into clear paragraphs, but it addresses a completely different topic regarding free water supply rather than whether price is the most important factor when purchasing products or services. While the arguments presented are structured logically for the chosen subject, failing to address the actual prompt severely limits the task achievement. The primary focus for improvement must be carefully analyzing the prompt before writing to ensure the essay directly answers the question asked.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay completely misunderstands the prompt, discussing free water provision instead of the role of price when buying products or services.
Read the task instructions carefully and underline key terms to ensure your entire response answers the exact prompt provided.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into clear paragraphs with simple cohesive devices, though progression is limited by the off-topic content.
Use a wider range of linking devices and ensure each body paragraph transitions smoothly to support your overall thesis.
Lexical Resource
A limited range of vocabulary is used with sufficient accuracy to express basic ideas, though word choices are sometimes repetitive or imprecise.
Focus on developing topic-specific vocabulary and collocation accuracy relevant to the actual task prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted, but grammatical errors and awkward phrasing occur frequently throughout.
Review modal verb combinations and clause structures to avoid errors like double modals and awkward prepositional connections.