There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive and negative development?
Sample Response
In an era when computer technology develops rapidly, the question of whether working and studying at home can bring more benefits has sparked an intense debate. From my perspective, it is a negative development. First of all, due to the lack of face-to-face interaction, people cannot understand the real meaning and emotion of other people through observing the facial expressionsexpression and body language, so they will have communicationcommunicative barriers, affecting interpersonal relationshipsthe interpersonal relationship. What’s more, it is also not conducive to improving work efficiency. For example, people in the company chat abouthave communication about small things beyond work. They can talk about what they ate last night or what they are going to do. It is a good chancechange to build a sound relationship with their colleagues. There is no denying that without good interpersonal relationships, it is impossible for people to complete team work perfectly. On the other hand, there are some benefits to people working or studying at homeabout the influence of people work or study at home. Firstly, people do not need to spend much time on commuting, which can give them more time to do meaningful things. Also, theyAlso they can reduce the cost of transportation to buy some daily necessities and improve their quality of life. Secondly, the home environmentthe environment of the house is more comfortable than that in ana office, people will not feel stress from their boss and feel more relaxed, to some extent improve their mental health. However, there are plenty of digital notifications that may distract people’s attention from their work or study, causing inefficiency and disruption. In conclusion, although working or studying at home can bring certain benefits, its adverse impacts on efficiency and interpersonal relationships cannot be ignored.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay presents a clear position throughout and successfully addresses both sides of the prompt with relevant supporting ideas. Its main strength lies in the logical progression of arguments regarding remote work and study. However, minor grammatical errors and slightly repetitive vocabulary occasionally limit fluency. To improve, focus on refining complex sentence structures and incorporating a wider range of precise lexical choices.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response clearly states a position and addresses the prompt by discussing both the drawbacks and advantages of working and studying from home.
Ensure both working and studying are given equal depth and specific elaboration throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is logical and ideas progress smoothly with effective use of basic cohesive devices.
Vary cohesive devices and transitional phrases to avoid relying on standard formulas like 'First of all' and 'On the other hand'.
Lexical Resource
An adequate range of vocabulary is used flexibly to convey meaning, though some word choices and collocations remain slightly awkward.
Incorporate more precise topic-specific vocabulary and idioms while avoiding repetitive phrases such as 'meaningful things'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used with good control, though noticeable minor errors in prepositions and article usage persist.
Proofread for minor grammatical inaccuracies, particularly article selection ('a office') and prepositional phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive and negative development?
Your response
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