In some parts of the world, it is becoming increasingly popular to try to find out the history of someone’s family. Why do you think people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
Recently, in most countries, it has become a trend to investigateit has been becoming a trend finding the history of people's liveslife, especially their family backgrounds. This trend can lead to several benefits in several areasbenefits for many aspects such as making it easier for employerseasing the employers to recruit suitable employeesto get a necessary employee, or collecting data on social groupsdata of social ranges in the countries for future usefor further uses, or even preserving national historieshistorical backgrounds among the nations. This essay, as my point of view lead to, will elaborate more about the reasons people doing this as I believe that this trend is a good improvement.
Firstly, how a family educates their children influences children's way of thinkingthe way of thinking of the children Deletein some ways. Besides, the beliefs a family instils in its childrenthe beliefs the family holds and teaches the children will always be with themwith the children. Thus children's first schoolthe first school for the children is the house they live in. An employee with so scheduled activities can be related to the way to the way of his/her parents educating him/her. In this regardRelating to this, corporations usetake this indicator, family backgroundthe family backgrounds, as one considerationas one of the considerations to select the applicants for appropriate positions.
Secondly, historians recognise this as an academic interest. They collect the information to gainas much as they can attempt to gain perspectives on society, the economy, and cultureperspectives of social, economy, and also culture from the society. They use this as the database to preserve the historical background to remind the young generations to not to forget about their own personal background family as well as to make several suggestion policies which are proper for the condition of the group of families inside the country for the government. As the result, there will be massive positive outcomes for both individuals and governments to deal with severe problems in society because the database includes beliefs, values, religions, and other relating things from the society.
To sum up, having considered all views above, I believe there will always be great to find out the historic background of families in the society.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear positive position and organizes its two main reasons into distinct paragraphs, with some useful attempts to explain social benefits. However, its account of why individuals investigate family history is often indirect or implausibly framed around employer screening and government databases, while frequent awkward phrasing reduces precision. The highest priority is to develop directly relevant motivations—such as identity, ancestry, or medical knowledge—with specific, logically connected support.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions receive a clear answer, but the proposed motivations are only partly relevant to personal interest in family history and are unevenly developed.
Explain two directly relevant reasons people research their ancestry and support each with a concrete personal or social example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion provide broadly clear progression, although some sentences carry loosely connected or repetitive ideas.
Give each body paragraph one precise controlling idea and make every supporting sentence advance that idea in a clear sequence.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make several points awkward or imprecise.
Prioritize natural collocations such as family upbringing, historical records, social data, and policy recommendations instead of forcing less familiar expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in clause formation, articles, prepositions, and verb patterns reduce control.
Proofread each complex sentence for a complete clause structure and correct verb pattern before adding further detail.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some parts of the world, it is becoming increasingly popular to try to find out the history of someone’s family. Why do you think people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
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