Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Many people prefer their daily routine while others always look for change as they believe the change would bring more benefits. In my opinion, I would agree with the latter point of view.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people want to stick to their routine. Firstly, they are passionate about what they do every day. For example, street artists in Vietnam love creating colourful artworks in public without any desire for change despite little earnings. Secondly, some people have merely adopted a fear of uncertainty that prevents them from changing their ways of life. If they changed their current jobs, there would be no guarantee that other jobs would bring the same level of satisfaction as the previous one, which explains why they embrace the routine over change.
On the other hand, I would side with those who think that change is better. People would have new exciting experiences. For example, instead of staying at home and watching TV, some people would go on a motorbike trip or do mountain climbing to enjoy the open air. Furthermore, making changes in one’s life is believed to enhance his/her talents. When a person focuses only on what he is doing daily, he would never know his true potential. A song composer would never discover his aptitude for singing if he did not dare to get on stage.
In conclusion, I believe changing one’s lifestyle continuously has a positive impact on his/her life.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the plural noun Original: routine Suggested revision: routines Why it matters: The plural subject “Many people” refers to multiple individual routines.
- 2. Use a precise verb Original: look for change Suggested revision: seek change Why it matters: “Seek change” is more concise and natural in formal writing.
- 3. Remove the unnecessary article Original: the change would bring Suggested revision: change brings Why it matters: Generic “change” takes no article, and the present tense matches the general belief.
- 4. Use concise wording Original: latter point of view Suggested revision: latter view Why it matters: “Latter view” expresses the same meaning more concisely.
- 5. Use the natural noun Original: colourful artworks Suggested revision: colourful works of art Why it matters: “Works of art” is more natural when referring to multiple creations.
- 6. Correct the clause form Original: despite little earnings Suggested revision: despite earning little Why it matters: The gerund clause naturally expresses the contrast with the artists’ low income.
- 7. Correct the collocation Original: merely adopted a fear Suggested revision: developed a fear Why it matters: People “develop” a fear; “adopt a fear” is not a natural collocation.
- 8. Use the distributive singular Original: ways Suggested revision: way Why it matters: The singular phrase is appropriate when each person has one general way of life.
- 9. Use a natural comparison Original: embrace the routine over change Suggested revision: prefer routine to change Why it matters: “Prefer X to Y” is the natural construction for this comparison.
- 10. Separate coordinate adjectives Original: new exciting experiences Suggested revision: new, exciting experiences Why it matters: A comma separates the coordinate adjectives describing the experiences.
- 11. Correct the activity collocation Original: do Suggested revision: go Why it matters: English uses “go” with this recreational activity.
- 12. Use natural wording Original: enjoy the open air Suggested revision: enjoy the outdoors Why it matters: “Enjoy the outdoors” is the more natural expression for this context.
Suggested Rewrites
- routine routines
- look for change seek change
- the change would bring change brings
- latter point of view latter view
- colourful artworks colourful works of art
- despite little earnings despite earning little
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response directly discusses both attitudes to change, sustains a clear preference, and develops each side with relevant examples in a logical structure. The main limitation is occasional imprecision in reasoning and expression, including broad claims about continuous change and several awkward collocations. The priority is to qualify the position more carefully and express supporting ideas with consistently natural word combinations while preserving the clear progression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
All parts of the task are addressed with a clear opinion and relevant, sufficiently developed reasons and examples.
Qualify the claim that continuous change is positive and explain when change is beneficial to make the position more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically through clearly focused paragraphs, and referencing and linking are generally well controlled.
Create a slightly fuller conclusion that synthesises the main reasoning rather than only restating the preferred view.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and topic-appropriate, though a few combinations such as adopted a fear and do mountain climbing are unnatural.
Use more idiomatic collocations, such as developed a fear and go mountain climbing, while retaining the existing range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally strong control, despite occasional awkward pronoun and conditional choices.
Use singular they consistently and distinguish general present conditions from hypothetical would constructions more precisely.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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