The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
ForFrom the last few decades, people have been using fossil fuels such as charcoal, petrol, gas, and diesel as their main source of energy. With increasing global warming due to the greenhouse effect of these fossilfossils fuels, people are becoming more aware ofgetting more noticed about the risks of using themunsafe use of them. Some people believeSome of them believe that a safe alternative source of energy should be urgently soughtshould be searched urgently to save our planet.
People use fossil fuelsfuel for various purposes such as using gas for cooking and air conditioningusing gas for cooking and in air conditioning, powering vehicles and factory machinery with petrol and dieseldriving engines with petroleum and diesel in vehicles and factories. So, we have enjoyed countless benefitsuncountable profits from using fossil fuelsby the use of fossil fuels. But it not only gives us benefits but also brings many adverse effects. The most terrible negative impact is its contribution to global warming. Carbon dioxide emissionsemission from burning fossil fuelsfrom burning of the fossil fuels causesmakes air pollution and also damages the ozone layerand also damage of ozone layer of our atmosphere which usually protects us from dangerous UV rays from the sun. Without the ozone layer, more UV rays will fall on our planet making the world very hot and increasing the risk of skin cancer among the people.
To prevent further damage to the ozone layerfurther damage of ozone layer, scientists and researchers are looking into Deleteother alternative sources of energy which are clean and safe.For example, Italy is famous for a widespread use of wind energy for several yearssince several years ago. Japanese are using nuclear power which is very cheap and clean. But the levelamount of global use of clean energy is much lower thanvery much less compared to the use of fossil fuels. So, governments are mainly responsible for exploring more sources of clean energy and requiring people to use themenforcing the people to use it by imposing regulations as well as by increasing people's awarenessthe people awareness of negative impacts of fossil fuels.
To conclude, as the global warming effects of fossil fuels is a highly challenging problem of our planet, increasing use of alternative clean and safe energy is urgently demanding to save our beautiful planet in healthy condition.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is clearly organised and offers relevant discussion of fossil-fuel harms and possible cleaner alternatives. However, its position is mostly implied, it does not adequately justify why this issue should outrank other global priorities, and some scientific claims are inaccurate. The most important improvement is to state a direct degree of agreement and develop a comparative argument focused on the phrase “most important global priority.”
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses relevant environmental concerns and alternatives, but the degree of agreement and the claim of overriding global priority are insufficiently addressed.
State the position explicitly and explain why energy alternatives deserve greater priority than other major global challenges.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress through clear paragraphs from fossil-fuel use and harm to alternatives and government action, although linking is sometimes basic.
Strengthen the logical connection between each paragraph and the central comparison implied by the question.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate environmental vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make several claims sound unnatural or imprecise.
Use precise combinations such as carbon emissions, renewable energy, public awareness, and encourage people to adopt alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and clause construction weaken accuracy.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and article use, then revise complex sentences so each clause has a clear grammatical relationship.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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