Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
The earlier we can ban smoking in public places, the better it would be for the human kind. In response to this concernHaving foreseen the same, many offices and governing bodies have imposedimposed a strict ban on public smoking. This measure is generally applauded by most peoplethe majority of mass. However, the opposing minority interpretinterrupt this ban as a restriction on individual freedoman act of arrest on one's free will. Let us discussdiscourse on this moot issue below.
It is generally agreed and even shown by scientific studies thatproven with scientific studies, that smoking is injurious to health. Health problems that smoking can induce are numerous. Cancer is among the major detrimental effects of smoking on one’s health. As it is rightly displayed on the cigarettecigar packets, smoking is one of the primary factors leading to cancer. Furthermore, the effects of smoking on the systemiceffects of smoking on the systemic and peripheral circulation in the human body are appalling, as put forward by medical experts. The havoc of this insane habit is so horrifying thatso horrifying, that research points towards its possible harmful effects on even unborn childrenunborn children, even. Smoking is considered one of several causes ofconsidered as a culprit among the many, behind the congenital birth defects and anomalies.
Another factor relevant to this issuefactor significant to this context would be the financial constraints imposed by smoking. In many developing countries, where people work on daily wages, the habit of smoking has an atrocious impact on their quality of life. In most ordinary familiesthe majority of the mediocre familiesaround the world, around the world, smoking drains athe significant part of their family budgets. For example, I witnessed many problems with reference to my father being a chronic smoker and the financial crisis it caused.
The amount of carbon and other toxic elements released into the atmosphereexhaled to the atmosphere by active smokers has reached such dizzy heights that its effect on passive smokers is more or less a reality now. In fact, the effect of first-hand smoke appears to affectis seen permeable to even the second and third-hand smokers in the spectrum. The significance of the public ban on smoking is not merely justified but necessarynot just justifying but a necessity as it calls for. As a result, it is widely banned in some offices and institutions. Awareness programmes are being conducted all around the world against this habit. Though the public ban on smoking is an individual constraint to one's freedom, considering the passive effects of smoking I would strongly agree with the banaccord win the ban. In my view, this would be a punitive measure to safeguard the health and wealth of the public or the society.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear pro-ban position and offers several developed reasons, with the discussion of passive smoking providing the strongest direct support for the claim. However, substantial attention to smokers' own health and finances weakens the focus on why smoking should be prohibited specifically in public places. Prioritise the effects on nearby people and explain more precisely how a public ban addresses those harms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear opinion is maintained and supported, but some developed material concerns smoking generally rather than the specific case for a public-place ban.
Make each body paragraph explicitly demonstrate why smoking in shared spaces justifies the proposed restriction.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a generally logical sequence with clear paragraph-level topics, although some links within and between ideas are imprecise.
Use a more focused progression from public harm to justification and then to the final position, removing loosely connected points.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows considerable range, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace forced expressions with standard combinations, especially when describing public opinion, personal freedom, and exposure to smoke.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main message, despite recurring errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, and punctuation.
Review sentence boundaries and noun-phrase grammar, then check each complex sentence for accurate agreement and preposition use.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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