A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Social status, wealth and material possessionspossession have turned into the indicators to judge someone in societyin the society these days while traditions, good qualitiesquality and honour are no longer valued, though they are the genuine basis for judging a personthe de facto to judge a person. I agree that the modern worldmodern world has a completely different set of criteria for assessing a member of societyassessing or honouring a member of the society, though they are not the true qualities that define a personthe real elements to define a person. Earlier, societies had some specific indicators to judge a man or woman. Among the judging indicators, they preferred qualities like honesty, kindness, trusttrusts, honour etc. But over timewith the change of time, such pointers have vanished. Unfortunately, present-day societyUnluckily the present society prefers social status or riches to judge anyone. A real-life experience may make it simpler. Recently, I closely observed a local election in a distant part of India. OfAmong the two candidates – one of them came from a high profile background while the other one was a shabby man who merely had his own permanent living space in the locality. The majority of the people supported the first individual. They took him granted as a gentleman as he is enriched with material possessions. On the contrary, only a few people supported the poor guy. He was unable to spend money on the electionspend bucks for the election but was competing on some moral grounds. He dreamt of changing the society. Unluckily he was defeated by the wealthy candidate. The rich man did not allow his opponentopposition to be an obstacle to his success. This triumph and defeat made me realise that material possessions are the key to judging as important in society. When people have enough riches to spend, they can buy social status and supportsupports. But unfortunately, when someone comes up with humane qualitieshumanitarian features, social elites label themterm them as old-fashioned. They are ignored. Therefore, I think such attitudes should changesuch ideas should be changed. We should value humane qualities more thanappreciate the humane features than social status and material possessions. Otherwise, the consequences will be detrimental. When social status isWhen the social status will be the basis for judging peoplethe indicator to judge oneself, I believe that would be too humiliating and may lead to massive social disorder.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and develops it through a relevant election example, which is its strongest feature. Its effectiveness is reduced by the absence of paragraphing and by frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors, although the central meaning remains understandable. Prioritise dividing the argument into logical paragraphs and revising collocations, articles, and sentence structures so the reasoning reads more precisely and professionally.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by a relevant extended example, though some claims are overgeneralised or insufficiently qualified.
Explain more carefully how the example represents wider social judgement and qualify broad claims about modern society.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly logical sequence, but the single-paragraph format and repetitive linking weaken organisation and progression.
Separate the thesis, example, analysis, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer internal topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range for discussing values and status, but frequent awkward or inaccurate word choices reduce precision.
Replace informal or unnatural phrases such as “spend bucks” and “humanitarian features” with precise academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are mixed, but frequent errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and conditionals limit accuracy.
Review article use and conditional structures, then correct recurring patterns such as “taken for granted” and “when status becomes.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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