Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?
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Some people believe that children should give greater emphasis to their own country's literature than to foreign worksfocus more on the literature of their own country rather than foreign works. AlthoughWhile it is true that local literature offers significant benefitshas many benefits, I believe that children should also study literaturealso be exposed to literature from other countries.
FirstFirstly, learning about the literature of their own country helps children understand their country's history and cultureunderstand their history and culture. For example, poems and stories about important historical events teach children about the past and help them value their cultural heritageappreciate their heritage. Without studying local literature, students may have a limited understanding of their own societylittle knowledge of their own society.
At the same timeHowever, it is also important for children to read literature from other cultureschildren to read foreign literature. Books from other countries introduce unfamiliarnew ideas and perspectives that they might not find in local works. This broadens their understandingknowledge of the world and helps them develop tolerance for and curiosity about different culturesdevelop tolerance and curiosity about different cultures. Moreover, foreign literature can make learning more interesting and motivating, especially if local literature feels repetitive or difficult.
In conclusion, I believe that while local literature is important, foreign works should also be integrated into the curriculumincluded in the curriculum. A balanced approach ensures that children learn about their own culture while gaining knowledge about the wider world.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, balanced position and develops both the cultural value of local literature and the broader benefits of foreign works in a logical structure. Its main limitation is that, at 191 words, the support remains brief and general, so the argument lacks the depth expected for Task 2; expand each main idea with more specific explanation and a fully developed example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear, relevant position is maintained, but the substantially under-length response develops its main ideas only briefly.
Extend both body arguments with fuller reasoning and specific, detailed examples to meet the required depth.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-focused paragraphs, with clear and generally natural cohesive links.
Use referencing and transitions within paragraphs to connect supporting details more subtly.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is appropriate and sufficiently varied, with effective expressions such as cultural heritage, perspectives, tolerance, and curriculum.
Increase precision by reducing repeated uses of literature and children through controlled paraphrase.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of simple and complex sentences is used accurately, with errors rare and meaning consistently clear.
Refine punctuation and vary complex sentence patterns further while preserving the current accuracy.