Television has destroyed communication among friends and family.
Sample Response
The invention of television is undoubtedly one of humankind'sthe humankind's greatest inventions. It is a meansway of communication among people within and across countriesof one country and different countries and nations. People watch TV to find out about the latest news, weather forecasts and sportsnews, weather, sports, etc. It is a great way to learn new thingslearn new and extend one's range of interests. Scientists say that children spend the same numberamount of hours in front of the televisionin front of TV as they do in school. I think that this can be said about many adultsmany grown people too. Also, television is a great way to reducemeans of eliminating stress and tension. One can relax and leave one's troubles behind lying on one's favourite sofa and watching a comedy. However, some people believe that
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers several clear observations about television’s informational and recreational benefits, and most individual sentences remain understandable. Its decisive limitation is incompleteness: at 119 words it ends mid-sentence before addressing whether television has destroyed communication among friends and family, so no developed position or relevant discussion emerges. Prioritise completing a clear stance and building two focused paragraphs that directly analyse television’s effects on interpersonal communication.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay supplies background benefits of television but does not answer the central claim, present a position, or develop relevant communication effects.
State clearly whether the claim is accepted and support that position with developed examples about interaction among relatives and friends.
Coherence and Cohesion
The benefits are listed in a broadly understandable order, but the response lacks paragraph development and stops at an unfinished transition.
Use an introduction with a position, one paragraph per main communication effect, and a completed conclusion.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary for television and leisure, though the short response contains several awkward or incomplete expressions.
Use precise phrases such as "humanity’s greatest inventions", "learn new things", and "adults", while developing communication-specific vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Several simple and complex sentences are accurate, but article, noun-form, and clause-completion errors remain, including the unfinished final sentence.
Complete every clause and proofread structures such as "one of humanity’s greatest inventions" and "lying on a sofa while watching".
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Television has destroyed communication among friends and family.
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