The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists?
Sample Response
In this contemporary world, news form an essential aspect of human existence, most importantly in this technological era. However, journalists hold an exclusive obligation in pIn this contemporary world, and news forms an essential aspect of human existence, most importantly in this technological era. However, journalists hold an exclusive obligation in providing the public with information. Meanwhile, the majority of these workers are not dedicated to the duties and basic instructions that govern this profession. As such, this essay shall explain ways in which the society can have to believe in the information which they bring.
First of all, most of these reporters alter the information they get in touch with. As a result, people hardly get access to the rightful content of an incidence which can be very misleading in a variety of ways. Because of this, since there are a variety of journalism individuals who normally gather data pertaining to a particular case, individuals can compare information from different sources to ascertain the validity of the massage. For instance, in Ghana, there are so many reporting industries like Joynews, Peace FM, Joy prime and so on who collect information about specific events, and clearly, their contents mostly differ.
Second of all, most people in this speciality fail to use the professional approach in gathering data and eventually end up collecting false information, which is later broadcasted to the public. I believe government should set up a regulatory body to closely monitor their activities and apply the necessary chastisement to any reporting officers and whole industries who fall culprits in delivering faulted information. By doing so, they will be more careful in going about their duties, and ultimately, the public will be assured of quality news. For example, in most countries, there are regulatory bodies that regulate the activities of journalists and apply the needful punishment to its members.
In conclusion, I believe these workers who provide the general public with important events, at times, do shabby work and fail to apply the required methodology in bringing us the information needed. Hence, these problems Can be mitigated if the state regulates their activities and the society makes sure information is obtained from different sources. They are providing the public with information.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix agreement Original: form Suggested revision: forms Why it matters: The uncountable noun 'news' takes a singular verb.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: exclusive obligation in providing Suggested revision: particular responsibility for providing Why it matters: 'Responsibility for providing' is the natural collocation in this context.
- 3. Choose accurate wording Original: basic instructions Suggested revision: ethical standards Why it matters: Professional conduct is governed by ethical standards rather than basic instructions.
- 4. Use precise verb Original: get in touch with Suggested revision: obtain Why it matters: Reporters obtain information; 'get in touch with' normally refers to contacting someone.
- 5. Use accurate adjective Original: rightful Suggested revision: accurate Why it matters: 'Accurate' expresses factual correctness, whereas 'rightful' refers to entitlement.
- 6. Correct word choice Original: incidence Suggested revision: incident Why it matters: An event is an 'incident'; 'incidence' means the rate at which something occurs.
- 7. Use concise noun Original: a variety of journalism individuals Suggested revision: various journalists Why it matters: 'Journalists' is the correct and concise term for people working in journalism.
- 8. Correct spelling Original: massage Suggested revision: message Why it matters: 'Message' means communicated information, while 'massage' has a different meaning.
- 9. Use accurate term Original: reporting industries Suggested revision: news organisations Why it matters: The named broadcasters are organisations rather than industries.
- 10. Use countable noun Original: their contents mostly differ Suggested revision: their reports often differ Why it matters: 'Reports' refers clearly to the separate accounts produced by the organisations.
- 11. Fix article choice Original: the Suggested revision: a Why it matters: The first mention of a nonspecific approach requires the indefinite article.
- 12. Use correct participle Original: broadcasted Suggested revision: broadcast Why it matters: The standard past participle of 'broadcast' is 'broadcast'.
Suggested Rewrites
- form forms
- exclusive obligation in providing particular responsibility for providing
- basic instructions ethical standards
- get in touch with obtain
- rightful accurate
- incidence incident
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is organised into a recognisable argument and offers relevant ideas about verifying reports and regulating journalism. However, it only implies how much journalists can be trusted and spends substantial space proposing solutions, while repeated wording, imprecise vocabulary, and grammatical errors weaken clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to state a precise degree of trust and make each paragraph explain and support that judgement directly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses journalistic unreliability with relevant ideas, but its answer to how much journalists can be trusted remains indirect and unevenly developed.
State a clear degree of trust in the introduction and make every supporting point explicitly justify that position rather than mainly proposing remedies.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing gives the essay a visible progression, although the duplicated opening, mechanical transitions, repetition, and stray final sentence disrupt cohesion.
Remove duplicated or disconnected material and use clearer logical links within paragraphs to show how each example supports the central judgement.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss the topic, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations reduce precision and sometimes distract the reader.
Prefer accurate common expressions such as news organisations, verify information, and appropriate penalties instead of forcing less suitable formal words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, phrasing, and sentence construction sometimes make meaning difficult to follow.
Build shorter, correctly controlled clauses first, checking subject-verb agreement and article use before combining ideas into complex sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists?
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