Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?
Sample Response
Nowadays, many people believe that education atin university level is the only way to get a good job. In contrast, some people think that working after high school is better since they can gain experience in a work environmentobtain experience in work environment. I will discuss both viewsoutline both issues with reasons and examples.
When it comes to securing a good jobTalking about a good job, it is not easy to achieve. We have to prepare ourselves both in terms of education and skill because they need to cooperate to make a good capability in ourselves, which we know as a key qualitya prior thing that employers seek in employeesin the employees. For example, in the case of a job interview, employersemployer commonly ask about our highest level of educationour last education whether it is relevant to the positionwhether it is appropriate for the job position or not. They believe that higher education provides people not only in knowledge term but also their maturity. Furthermore, through university education, we are not only given theoretical knowledgesubsequences of theories but also practical trainingbut also practices. So, before we go to the workplacework field, we already know how to adapt to our chosen professionexpected job based on our educational backgroundbackground education.
It is true that we need experienceexperiences to do better in our job, but it cannot be denied that education is more important than experienceit. Take a teachingteacher’s career as an example. By teaching earlier, you may have more experience than the new one who just graduated from university. But graduated university students can teach their students with better theories or concept from each material with good methods.
To sum up, I must say that we need higher education to gain more information from the experts about our special field; therefore,field, therefore we can do our best to show our capability in front of employers to convinceemphasise them that we deserve that job. So, I tend to disagree that working after school is better than continuingwork after school is better than to continue our study at university.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear preference for university education and supports it with relevant ideas about employer expectations and professional preparation. However, development is uneven: discussion of work experience is brief and comparisons are sometimes asserted rather than fully explained, while frequent collocational and grammatical problems make several sentences awkward. The priority is to develop both alternatives more precisely and express the comparison through simpler, reliably controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both views and states a clear position, but support for the value of work experience is limited and some claims remain insufficiently explained.
Develop the work-experience view fairly, then compare it directly with university education using a fully explained example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and overall progression are clear, although some long sentences contain loosely connected ideas and linking is occasionally mechanical.
Give each body paragraph one controlling idea and use clearer internal sequencing from claim to explanation and example.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and attempts some range, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision.
Replace awkward phrases such as "make a good capability" and "subsequences of theories" with natural, context-appropriate combinations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, plurals, and clause construction frequently weaken control.
Prioritize accurate subject-verb agreement, articles, and noun forms in shorter sentences before attempting longer multi-clause structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?
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