In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?
Sample Response
In today's world, traffic congestion is an extremely difficult problem for commuters around the globe. A 10 minutes office to home ride had become a pathetic 40 minutes or even longer ride, spending one's valuable time on roads. This essay will explore some of the causes and possible measuresrecommended practices to addressreduce this issue.
The increase in traffic could result frompossible sources for increased traffic could be from several factors. Firstly, I consider migration of people from ruralurban areas to cities in search of workin search of making a living as one of the primary reasons. This, in turn, leads to an increased numberleads to increased number of vehicles on the road. Based on a recent study conducted by the Transportation Department of London, there is a 20% surge in volume of car sale in the United Kingdom each year over the last decade. Secondly, failing to adhere to traffic rules is another factor contributing to traffic delaysfactor contributing to the waiting time due to traffic.
The government and public should be pragmatic about the actions that will solve this issue. The government should encourage people to use public transportencourage using public transport instead of personal vehicles because in my country most cars carry no passenger other than the driverone will hardly find a co-passenger in a car other than the driver. In addition, the traffic authoritiestraffic control department should enforceimplement stringent traffic rules, for instance, by diverting traffic from a particular avenue during peak hoursfor instance, diverting traffic in peak hours on a particular avenue.
In summary, a rapid rise in the number of car usersa rapid rise in the car users is one of the major reasonsone of a major reason for increasingly severepathetic traffic congestion. The government and the public should cooperateThe government and public should cooperate to reduce the number of vehicles on the road by using public transportreduce the number of vehicles by using public transport.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response addresses both causes and solutions and maintains a clear four-paragraph progression, with enough relevant detail to keep the argument understandable. Its main weakness is imprecise development supported by awkward or sometimes contradictory wording and recurring grammar errors; the priority is to explain each cause-solution link more convincingly while correcting article, agreement, and noun-form errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are covered with relevant causes and measures, but several points remain briefly or inconsistently explained.
Clarify how each stated cause increases congestion and show more specifically how each proposed action would reduce it.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and sequencing are clear, although some links within paragraphs are mechanical or logically loose.
Strengthen progression by connecting every example explicitly to the cause or solution it is intended to support.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Use natural combinations such as increase in car sales, traffic volume, and severe congestion, and avoid misusing emotive words such as pathetic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted and meaning remains clear, but errors in articles, agreement, tense, and noun forms recur.
Prioritize agreement and noun-phrase accuracy, especially with plural count nouns, articles, and verb forms in time-based statements.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?
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