Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Nowadays the tourism industry is growing at a tremendous speed. Due to the boom in transport industries and holiday packages, people often travel other countries for holidays and on official trips. There is a debate ongoing on whether the visitors from other nationality should follow local customs and behaviours during their stay in host countries. I will discuss this in below paragraphs.
Firstly, when the foreigners visit other countries they carry their culture along with them. But, during their stay in the host country, if they adopt the local customs, it will be helpful for them to get better communication with the local people. Meanwhile, when they adjust themselves to the local people's behaviour, it will make them easier to socialise with them. Also, this will help local people to better understand the foreigners.
Secondly, this will help the foreigner to have a good idea about local cultures and rituals. This understating helps our culture to spread globally, thereby more and more people get attracted toward the local culture. This, in turn, attracts a number of visitors from different country's to visit. This will help in increasing the tourism industry and also helps in giving employment opportunity in the related industries.
On the other hand, when the foreigners share their culture and behaviour with the local people it gives an opportunity to local people to a better understanding of their culture and characters. This will have an immense influence on local people's opinion about foreigners and their culture. Also, this helps them to identify the negative aspects of their culture and gives them an opportunity to correct it.
To sum up, by considering the above benefits, I personally believe that the balanced exchange of cultures and behaviour of foreigners with local people will benefit both the countries to come together and calm down if there are any frictions between the countries. Also, this will have a positive impact on the economy of both countries.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add travel preposition Original: travel other countries Suggested revision: travel to other countries Why it matters: Travel requires to before a destination.
- 2. Use natural industry phrase Original: boom in transport industries Suggested revision: growth of transport services Why it matters: The replacement describes expanding travel provision more naturally and precisely.
- 3. Correct debate phrase Original: a debate ongoing on whether Suggested revision: an ongoing debate about whether Why it matters: Ongoing belongs before the noun, and debate takes about in this construction.
- 4. Use plural nationality Original: visitors from other nationality Suggested revision: visitors of other nationalities Why it matters: Visitors from different places require a plural reference to nationalities.
- 5. Use uncountable behaviour Original: behaviours Suggested revision: behaviour Why it matters: Behaviour is uncountable when referring generally to social conduct.
- 6. Correct paragraph reference Original: in below paragraphs Suggested revision: in the following paragraphs Why it matters: The following paragraphs is the standard forward reference in an essay.
- 7. Remove generic article Original: when the foreigners visit Suggested revision: when foreigners visit Why it matters: The generic plural noun foreigners does not take the definite article.
- 8. Separate dependent clause Original: other countries they carry Suggested revision: other countries, they carry Why it matters: A comma is needed after the introductory dependent clause.
- 9. Use direct communication verb Original: get better communication with Suggested revision: communicate better with Why it matters: Communicate better with is the natural expression for improved interaction.
- 10. Use concise adaptation verb Original: adjust themselves to Suggested revision: adapt to Why it matters: Adapt to expresses adjustment to local behaviour directly and naturally.
- 11. Correct adjective structure Original: it will make them easier to socialise Suggested revision: it will be easier for them to socialise Why it matters: The adjective easy describes the activity, so the sentence needs an anticipatory it structure.
- 12. Use natural visitor reference Original: help local people to better understand the foreigners Suggested revision: help local people better understand foreign visitors Why it matters: The revision removes an unnecessary infinitive marker and uses a neutral reference to visitors.
Suggested Rewrites
- travel other countries travel to other countries
- boom in transport industries growth of transport services
- a debate ongoing on whether an ongoing debate about whether
- visitors from other nationality visitors of other nationalities
- behaviours behaviour
- in below paragraphs in the following paragraphs
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay discusses both cultural adaptation and openness to visitors' customs, and it reaches a clear, balanced view that exchange can benefit visitors and host communities. Its organisation is easy to follow, but several arguments are general or questionable and recurring grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each view with one concrete example and edit sentence patterns for accurate, natural expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a clear personal opinion are presented, with relevant benefits explained, although some claims remain broad or insufficiently supported.
Illustrate each view with a specific custom and explain how adaptation or acceptance would affect visitors and residents in practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and a logical progression through the two views support readability, though repeated this constructions make cohesion mechanical.
Use specific referencing such as adopting local customs or sharing visitors' traditions instead of repeatedly beginning links with this.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for culture and tourism, but recurring inaccurate word forms, collocations, and possessives reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as travel to other countries, visitors of other nationalities, communicate better, and visitors from different countries.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is attempted and meaning remains clear, but errors in articles, agreement, complements, and clause formation recur.
Check complete verb patterns and agreement, especially make it easier for them, gives local people an opportunity, and both countries benefit.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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