Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people?
Sample Response
Man, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when he lived in the caves to nowadays when he lives in a comfortable apartment. But one thing that remains the same is that people always lived in groups and organisations such as families, which are smaller groups, and tribes, which are larger groupsfamilies, the smallest group, and tribes, the bigger group. I think that the reason people live in groups is thatreason why people live in groups is because we need communication and more importantly, we needwhat is more important we need support to survive. So, throughout historyfrom old times to nowadays people formed groupspeople merged in groups because it made them stronger and helped themto overcome many obstacles and difficulties. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons and examples to support my answer. First of all, people need to communicate with each other. We need to share ourout ideas and thoughts with each other. I think it is very important to know that someone thinks the same way one does and supports one. In addition, communication is one of the characteristics of social animalsfeatures of reasonable animals. All animals that can communicate with each other live in herds and support each other when one of them is in need. The second reason whyThe second reason, why I think groups and organisationsorganisation are important to people is because they make us stronger. For example, a football team playsfootball team plays more effectively than an individual playerbetter than one player. Another example is the ancient hunters. In ancient timesAt old times people gathered in order to get food and survive in harshsevere conditions. It was impossible for one man to kill a big animal, but when people gathered in groups their chances of success increasedtheir chances increased. Scientists say that people survived because they lived together and supported each other. For the reasons whichFor the reasons, which I mentioned above, I believe groups and organisations play an essential role in our liveslife. Moreover, human developmentpeople's evolution would not be possible without them.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s clearest strength is its direct explanation of two relevant reasons, supported by understandable examples from teamwork and survival. Its main limitation is that several points are repetitive or asserted broadly rather than developed with precise reasoning, while frequent awkward phrasing reduces polish. The highest-priority improvement is to build each reason through a focused explanation and a specific, credible example while editing collocations and sentence structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers why groups matter and develops communication and mutual support with relevant examples.
Develop each reason more precisely and replace broad assertions about animals or evolution with clearly explained evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a clear introduction, two-reason progression, and conclusion, although repetition and mechanical signposting reduce cohesion.
Use tighter topic sentences and remove repeated statements so each paragraph advances the argument more efficiently.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to discuss social interaction and survival, but several word combinations are awkward or imprecise.
Improve collocational accuracy by replacing phrases such as “merged in groups” and “at old times” with natural alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, despite recurring agreement, article, punctuation, and clause-construction errors.
Edit systematically for subject-verb agreement, articles, and cleaner complex-sentence boundaries.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people?
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