Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Technology has revolutionised the way peoplehuman beings go about their daily liveslife. This is evident from the fact that many people now work from homepeople nowadays work from the comfort of their homes. Some argue that this practice brings with it a myriad of benefitsbrings with its myriad of benefits, while others reject this viewothers refute this. Both sides of this debate will be analysed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is reached.
On the one hand, working from home can save an employer office rental costs to a great degree. For example, Sydney, Australia, isSydney, Australia is one such place where the cost of renting office spacecosts of renting an office space have become exorbitanthave risen to exorbitant levels in the past few decades. As a result, a large proportion of employers’ funds must be allocated to renthave to be devoted to this area, and this limitsencumbers their ability to earn a decent profit. When looking at the discussion in this light, the merits of working from one’s home are clearly seen.
On the other hand, many contend that the drawbackscontend that drawbacks of working from home outweigh its benefits. For instance, a recent British study found that the majority of the peoplethat majority of the people working from home had trouble meeting deadlines set by their organisationsdeadlines that were set by their organisations. This habitual lateness can lead to failure to achievefailure to the achievement of organisational goals. Thus, it is obvious why many people do not support the notion of working from home.
After consideringpondering upon both sides of this argument, it is felt that working from home is much more of a positive development than a negative onethan negative. It is thus hoped that people and organisations will continue to reap the benefitsbounties of working from home into the foreseeable future.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is easy to follow, addresses both views, and maintains a clear favourable opinion, with well-controlled paragraph progression and varied language. The main limitation is that each side rests on only one somewhat narrow example, so the argument is less fully developed than its fluent presentation suggests. The highest-priority improvement is to deepen the explanation of both perspectives and connect the final preference more explicitly to the evidence presented.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and the writer's opinion are clear, but the arguments are relatively narrow and only moderately developed.
Explain a broader consequence of each example and show directly why the benefit ultimately outweighs the drawback.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear four-paragraph structure, with effective referencing and cohesive links throughout.
Make transitions less formulaic by linking the conclusion directly to the specific reasoning developed in the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad and generally precise vocabulary, though occasional awkward collocations and word forms remain.
Refine phrases such as brings with it a myriad of benefits and failure to achieve organisational goals for fully natural usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex sentences are mostly well controlled, with a few errors in articles, possessives, and comparative constructions.
Check noun phrases and comparison structures carefully, especially expressions involving employer costs, majorities, and positive versus negative outcomes.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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