Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
These days, there are a lot of people who do their work from home; either it is a part-time or a full-time job. People have argued about it, as some of them believe that working from home has many advantages while others do not agree with it. The following essay will discuss in details about it, but in some circumstances, I would agree if working from home some benefits for employee and employers themselves.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use concise wording Original: there are a lot of people Suggested revision: many people Why it matters: The shorter phrase expresses the same idea more directly.
- 2. Choose a direct verb Original: do their work Suggested revision: work Why it matters: The verb alone is more concise and natural here.
- 3. Correct paired structure Original: either it is a part-time or a full-time job Suggested revision: whether they work part-time or full-time Why it matters: Whether correctly introduces the two alternative working arrangements.
- 4. Clarify the disagreement Original: People have argued about it Suggested revision: People disagree about this arrangement Why it matters: The revision identifies the ongoing disagreement more precisely.
- 5. Remove vague wording Original: some of them believe Suggested revision: some believe Why it matters: The pronoun is unnecessary because the group is already clear.
- 6. Use precise wording Original: others do not agree with it Suggested revision: others disagree Why it matters: The concise verb states the opposing view clearly.
- 7. Sentence rewrite Original: The following essay will discuss in details about it, but in some circumstances, I would agree if working from home some benefits for employee and employers themselves. Suggested revision: This essay discusses both views, and I believe that working from home can benefit both employees and employers in some circumstances. Why it matters: The rewrite fixes the malformed clauses while preserving the stated opinion.
Suggested Rewrites
- there are a lot of people many people
- do their work work
- either it is a part-time or a full-time job whether they work part-time or full-time
- People have argued about it People disagree about this arrangement
- some of them believe some believe
- others do not agree with it others disagree
Why this response received Band 3.5
The response establishes the topic and signals an intention to discuss both sides, but it is only an introductory paragraph and largely restates the prompt, leaving both views, supporting ideas, and the writer’s position undeveloped. The highest priority is to produce a complete essay of at least 250 words with separate, explained arguments for each view and a clear, grammatically expressed opinion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response only paraphrases the issue and announces a discussion, without actually explaining either view or establishing a clear position.
Write a complete response that develops both perspectives with reasons or examples and states an unambiguous opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The short paragraph follows a basic introductory sequence, but there is no essay-level progression or paragraph structure.
Organise the response into an introduction, focused body paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with awkward combinations such as discussing in detail about something and having benefits for employee.
Use a wider range of precise topic vocabulary and check common collocations and singular-plural forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some basic clauses are understandable, but frequent structural errors culminate in a final sentence whose meaning is difficult to follow.
Build complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then check agreement, articles, and conditional structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Your response
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