The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.
Sample Response
The table shows two sets of related information- the relative weekly cost, in pounds, for renting a property with one, two or three bedrooms in three different suburbs of London and an indication of the kind of annual salary someone would need to be able to rent property in these areas. Of the three areas mentioned, Notting Hill is the most expensive area with weekly rents starting at £375 (salary required approximately £99,000 per year) and rising to £738 per week for a three bedroom property and to afford a large apartment a Londoner would require a salary of £200,000 per annum. Alternatively, Fulham is the cheapest area shown with rents ranging from £215 per week for a one bedroom property to £600 per week for a three bedroom property. To rent in this area, salaries need to be somewhere between £56,000 and £158,000 depending on the number of bedrooms required. For those able to pay in the middle price range for accommodation, Regent's Park might be a more suitable district with its house rent from 325 to 650 pound per week.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use explanatory colon Original: related information- Suggested revision: related information: Why it matters: A colon correctly introduces the two categories described next.
- 2. Match table label Original: suburbs Suggested revision: areas Why it matters: The visual labels them as areas and does not establish that each is a suburb.
- 3. Remove vague wording Original: kind of annual salary Suggested revision: annual salary Why it matters: The table gives specific required salaries, so 'kind of' is unnecessary.
- 4. Use contrast transition Original: Alternatively, Fulham Suggested revision: By contrast, Fulham Why it matters: The sentence contrasts the cheapest area with the most expensive rather than offering an alternative.
- 5. State range directly Original: somewhere between £56,000 and £158,000 Suggested revision: between £56,000 and £158,000 Why it matters: 'Somewhere' weakens a numerical range that the table presents clearly.
- 6. Correct rent range structure Original: with its house rent from Suggested revision: with weekly rents ranging from Why it matters: The plural noun and participle form the natural structure before a numerical range.
- 7. Add currency and plural Original: 325 to 650 pound per week Suggested revision: £325 to £650 per week Why it matters: The range needs currency symbols, and this revision avoids the incorrect singular unit.
- 8. Use table terminology Original: the relative weekly cost Suggested revision: the weekly rental charges Why it matters: The revision matches the measure presented in the table more directly.
- 9. State relationship directly Original: an indication of Suggested revision: the corresponding Why it matters: The salaries are exact values linked to each rent, so a direct relational phrase is clearer.
- 10. Add property article Original: to be able to rent property Suggested revision: to rent a property Why it matters: A singular countable use of 'property' requires an article, and the shorter form is natural.
- 11. Use formal comparison Original: the cheapest area shown Suggested revision: the least expensive area shown Why it matters: The revision provides a more formal comparison suitable for an academic report.
- 12. Hyphenate compound adjective Original: a one bedroom property Suggested revision: a one-bedroom property Why it matters: The compound modifier before 'property' needs a hyphen.
Suggested Rewrites
- related information- related information:
- suburbs areas
- kind of annual salary annual salary
- Alternatively, Fulham By contrast, Fulham
- somewhere between £56,000 and £158,000 between £56,000 and £158,000
- with its house rent from with weekly rents ranging from
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report gives a clear overview of the price hierarchy and accurately supports it with rental and salary ranges for Notting Hill and Fulham. Its main limitation is uneven coverage: Regent's Park is identified as the middle-priced area, but none of its salary figures are reported and two-bedroom comparisons are absent. The highest-priority improvement is to add one concise cross-area comparison for the same property size, including both rent and required salary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The most and least expensive areas are accurately identified and well supported, but Regent's Park salary data and direct same-size comparisons are omitted.
Compare one-bedroom or three-bedroom properties across all three areas and include the corresponding Regent's Park salary figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the table's purpose to the highest, lowest, and middle price areas, though the single paragraph and one long sentence limit clarity.
Place the overview in its own sentence or paragraph and divide the Notting Hill comparison into shorter units.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise for rents, salaries, ranges, and affordability, with only a few awkward or inaccurate choices.
Use natural forms such as 'weekly rent', 'a three-bedroom property', and '£650 per week' instead of 'house rent' or '650 pound'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are handled with generally good control, although punctuation and sentence boundaries are occasionally strained.
Split the long Notting Hill sentence and use consistent hyphenation and plural forms for bedroom counts, currencies, and property descriptions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.
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