There is a problem with the changing room in your gym. You reported it several times, but it was not resolved. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter: - Describe the problem. what the gym’s response was - when you reported the problem? - Say what you would like the manager to do about the problem.
Sample Response
Dear Manager,
I am Geetha, a member of the Fitness Gym for 2 years. I am writing this letter to address an issue in the ladies' changing roomLadies changing room for the past month.
Firstly, the issue is that the latch of the door is brokenunder repair, it is very difficult for the ladies who use the room. In order to change, two peopleladies are needed, one of whomwhere one needs to hold the door from the outsidefront side and the otherthe other one canwill use the room and vice versavise- versa. Due to this, it prolongs to consume time.
Secondly, the floors are untidy, due to this most ladies feel uncomfortable exercisingfeel uncomfortable to practice during their sessionssession. We have already made a complaint to the gym coordinator regarding this issue last month, andlast month, they informed us that they wouldwill take necessary action. However, so farBut until now, there is no progress. Due to this, most ladies find it very difficultfeel it’s very difficult for them to come to the gym and some are planning to cancel their membershipsquit from their membership.
Therefore, we are requesting you to take immediate action on this matter as soon as possibleat the earnest. So, we will try to continue our membership as we have planned earlier.
Yours Faithfully
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter has a clear purpose, a generally suitable formal tone, and enough concrete detail to make the changing-room problems and their consequences understandable. Its main limitation is imprecise language and sentence construction, which repeatedly makes otherwise relevant points sound awkward, while the requested remedy remains vague. Prioritise stating the specific repairs and cleaning action required, then revise recurring collocation, agreement, and comma-splice errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all required areas are addressed, though the requested action is vague and the history mentions only one complaint rather than the several reports in the situation.
Specify that the manager should repair the latch, arrange regular floor cleaning, and confirm when these actions will be completed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear problem-response-request sequence, but repetitive connectors and several overloaded sentences make cohesion mechanical.
Use fewer repeated linking phrases and separate each cause, consequence, and request into cleanly controlled sentences.
Lexical Resource
The letter has enough vocabulary to describe the situation, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as 'prolongs to consume time' and 'quit from their membership' reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations with natural phrases such as 'takes extra time,' 'exercise comfortably,' and 'cancel their memberships.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but comma splices, agreement errors, and faulty clause construction recur throughout the letter.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries and check subject-verb and pronoun agreement before adding more complex clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
There is a problem with the changing room in your gym. You reported it several times, but it was not resolved. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter:
- Describe the problem. what the gym’s response was
- when you reported the problem?
- Say what you would like the manager to do about the problem.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.