You live in a room in the college hostel which has serve problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super’s permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter: - Introduce yourself - Describe your problems - Explain what type of room you would prefer
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to request a transfermake a request to transfer me into another room in your college hostel due to some problems.
I have been studying for my degreepursuing graduation at Trinity Collegein your ‘Trinity College’. A room, on the ground floor, has been allotted to me. I share itI had been sharing it with another student.
Let me explain to you the problems I am experiencingproblems that I am confronting while living in that room. The door bolt had been broken and suffice to say that water facility is available but poor drainage system makes it hard to live in it. Besides, there is no separate almirah for each candidate as one cannot blame the other if anything gets stolen.
Would you be kind enough to transfer me into another room? I don’t mind being on another floorhaving it on any other floor; but, it must be secure enough for me to store my belongingssafe to keep things, while I am attending classeswhile I would be attending classes . This would be possible ifand this is possible if a personal wardrobea separate almirah is provided with a lock. Moreover, good drainage would prevent foul smellsgood drainage would not create a foul smell. If it is not shared. It would be icing on the cake as I am very laborious and preparing for competitive exams.
I hope you would look into the matter and try to resolve these problemsresolve it within the next week, before the first-term examswithin a week before the first term exams.
Looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
Yours faithfullyFaithfully,
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter has a clear purpose, covers all three requested points, and gives useful detail about the current problems and preferred replacement room. Its main limitation is uneven language control: several awkward word choices, grammatical slips, and a sentence fragment reduce clarity and formality. The priority is to express each problem and preference in direct, complete sentences with accurate articles and natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all bullet points are addressed, and the requested move is supported with relevant detail in a suitably formal tone.
Remove the less relevant comment about competitive exams and state the preferred room arrangements more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information is organised into purposeful paragraphs and generally progresses logically from introduction to problems and preferences.
Improve links within the longer paragraphs and integrate the fragment about a non-shared room into a complete sentence.
Lexical Resource
The letter uses a sufficient range for accommodation problems, although several choices such as candidate, laborious, and water facility are unnatural.
Use more precise collocations such as resident, hardworking, reliable water supply, and secure storage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message, but article, tense, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Check articles and verb forms, and rewrite fragments and loosely joined clauses as complete, accurately punctuated sentences.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You live in a room in the college hostel which has serve problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super’s permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter:
- Introduce yourself
- Describe your problems
- Explain what type of room you would prefer
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.