You live in an area where some sports facilities are needed for people your age. Write a letter to local authorities. In your letter: - Mention the existing facilities - Ask for more facilities to be built - Explain how these facilities will be useful for people your age.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter in regards to, request you to provide more additional facilities to our locality. My name is Anish, and I am from the Thrissur district.
As you may be aware, in our local areacouncil only a limited number of facilities are availablea limited number of facilities are only available for both amateur and professional athletes for regular usefor their regular usage. Most of the facilities are in poor condition and unsuitable for regular usein improper condition for usage. Furthermore, because of this dire situation, young people my ageyoungsters are not able to continue their regular trainingpractices.
We recently learnedVery recently, we understand that authorities are planning to provide extra financial support for younger residentsupcoming generations to improve their trainingfor their better practices. I kindly request you provide additional monetary support to our locality. I think this initiativeinitiation will support their trainingenhance their focus, and they can achieve their sporting goalsgreat goals in their life. Apart from this, this monetary support will help them to purchase new equipment and renovatemore pieces of equipment and renovation of our older clubhouse.
Lastly, we are planning to recruit more members from different age groupsadd more people in different age groups to our local club. We are planning yoga, Zumba and aerobics classesWe are planning for Yoga, Zumba, and Aerobic classes for different age groups. These classes may help them to avoid a sedentary lifestyleovercome the sedentary lifestyle in different age groups.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerelySincerely,
Why this response received Band 5.5
The letter is organised into recognizable stages and clearly conveys concern about inadequate local sports provision. However, it only partly fulfils the request because it focuses on financial support, equipment, renovation, and broadly targeted classes instead of clearly proposing new facilities for the writer's age group; the priority is to name the existing and requested facilities and explain their specific benefits.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter mentions limited, poorly maintained provision and its effects, but it does not clearly request specific facilities to be built and drifts beyond the stated age group.
Identify current facilities, request two or three concrete new facilities, and link each one directly to the needs of people your age.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing gives the letter a broadly logical sequence, although the shift from facilities to funding and then classes weakens the central progression.
Organise the body directly around the three bullet points and keep every supporting detail tied to sports facilities.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the message, but frequent awkward combinations such as more additional facilities, improper condition for usage, and this initiation reduce precision.
Use natural civic and sports collocations such as additional facilities, in poor condition, funding, and renovate the clubhouse.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but errors in sentence construction, word order, prepositions, and parallelism recur without usually obscuring meaning.
Edit each sentence for a complete grammatical frame, especially after request and in lists joining purchases, repairs, and activities.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You live in an area where some sports facilities are needed for people your age. Write a letter to local authorities. In your letter:
- Mention the existing facilities
- Ask for more facilities to be built
- Explain how these facilities will be useful for people your age.
Your response
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