Mrs Barrete, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrete, In your letter: - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do this work - explain when you will and will not be available
Sample Response
Dear Mrs Barrete, I am writing this letter because I would like to apply for the position advertisedget some information about this ad you placed. I can help you in your home. I can do all the household tasksall types of activities that are needed for the daily routinenecessary for daily routine work. I am an experienced cooka specialist in cooking and can prepare a wide range of dishesmake all types of dishes. Although not only an expert in cooking, I also do all kinds of work necessary for daily routine like cleaning the house, washing the clothes, ironing, and all types of work that you want. CurrentlyActually I ami m jobless and i am looking for a new jobsearching of new job. I have expertiseexperties in this type of workin this job, and I have experiencei have an experience in a similar rolerelated to this, I can handle the worki can manage it. I am available for this job from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m.9am to 5.pm. During these hours i can perform my duty and i need two off Saturday and Sunday. IF u are willing to giving me this job so kindly inform me therefore i can this start this job from next summer. I am looking forward toyour hearing from you. Yoursyours sincerely, Munnaza Shafique
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response addresses the requested areas by identifying household tasks, explaining the applicant's interest, and stating working hours and unavailable days. However, the development is repetitive and the formal register is weakened by texting forms, inconsistent capitalization, and frequent grammar errors that sometimes make sentences difficult to follow. The priority is to rewrite the application in clear paragraphs using complete, accurately formed sentences and consistently professional language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are addressed, but the reason for wanting the work is thinly developed and the tone is inconsistently appropriate for a job application.
Explain the motivation more specifically and maintain a polite professional register throughout, avoiding forms such as u.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a broadly sensible order, but ideas are repetitive, paragraphing is absent, and several connections between clauses are awkward.
Group help offered, reasons for applying, and availability into separate paragraphs with simple, accurate transitions.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main message, but repetition, spelling errors, and inaccurate word combinations limit precision.
Replace repeated phrases such as all types and daily routine with specific vocabulary, and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some simple structures are accurate, but frequent errors in capitalization, articles, prepositions, verb forms, and clause construction reduce control.
Focus on writing complete sentences with capital I, correct verb patterns, and accurate prepositions before attempting longer structures.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Mrs Barrete, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrete, In your letter:
- suggest how you could help her in her home
- say why you would like to do this work
- explain when you will and will not be available
Your response
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