According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average ‘holiday’ is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want exitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Holidays are important because they provide a break from our daily routinenormal daily routine and from workfrom the world of work. Traditionally, holidays have been seen as a time to relax and an opportunityas a time for relaxation and as an opportunity to visit another country to learn aboutin order to find out about its geography and customs. Nowadays, however, it seems that other types of holidaysholiday are becoming popular.
Some people want an adventurous holidaytheir holiday to be a kind of adventure, and find this more exciting than going to the beach or visiting museums. On an adventure holiday, you may stay in quite basic accommodation rather thanquite basic accommodation, rather than a luxurious hotel. Activities may involve things such as bush walking or cycling, or may form part of an aid project designed to help communities in remote areas. Such holidaysHolidays such as these are popular with people of all ages and can often help to promote tourism in rural areasenvironments.
The increasing popularity of dangerous sports has also boosted the number of adventure holidays; for example, water sports, mountain climbing or paragliding. These holidays are more popular with the younger generation, as they can be both physically and mentally demanding. Participants are often seeking the sort of thrills that they cannot get in ordinary life.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is clearly organized and uses strong, accurate language to describe the rise and appeal of adventure holidays. However, it remains 50 words below the minimum and, more importantly, never states whether the writer agrees or disagrees with the claim, so the central task is only partially addressed. The highest-priority improvement is to establish a clear position early, develop reasons supporting it, and confirm it in a conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant aspects of adventure holidays are explained, but the required agree-or-disagree position is absent and the under-length response ends without resolving the question.
State a clear degree of agreement in the introduction, build the discussion around reasons for that view, and add a concise conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in a clear progression from background to forms and attractions of adventure travel, with effective paragraphing and linking.
Add a concluding stage that draws the developed points together and connects them explicitly to the writer's position.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of accurate, topic-specific vocabulary, including effective language for accommodation, tourism, and demanding activities.
Extend the lexical range toward evaluation by using precise expressions that compare changing preferences rather than mainly describing holiday types.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used with strong control, and nearly all sentences are accurate and easy to follow.
Polish punctuation around examples and lists so the already strong grammatical control is consistently precise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average ‘holiday’ is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want exitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?
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