children who are brought up by wealthy parent. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Over the past few decades, along with growing interest in children'schild education, people’s attention to the family environment in whichthe family environment where a child is brought up has also significantly increased. Some people have begun to feel that a child who has grown up in a poor family tendstend to be better prepared to deal with problems. In my opinion, however, family environment alone does not greatlymuch influence a child’s ability to solve problems.
A child who was born into a poor family would have had more situations where they had to solve a problem or make a decision on their own. This is because in most disadvantagedunfortunate families, both parents are usually working and children are put into situations where they have to take care of themselves. By contrast, due to their wealth, children from wealthy familiesrich children can experience and learn things that disadvantagedunfortunate children cannot. For example, they usually go to the best schools and receive a higher-quality education therea higher education there, which prepares them better for solving problems in their life.
However, few would disagree with the fact that each individual is different. That is, problem-solving skillsproblem solving skills come more from life experience. The more a person experiencesThat is, the more a person experiences in life, the more they can use these experiences to adjust, to adapt and to solve problems they encounter. Personality can also bePersonality also can be a factor in dealing with problems. A person who is optimistic, outgoing, confident and open-minded can look at and solve problems more effectively.
As discussed above, nature and nurture have an equal influence on a child’s ability to face challenges. Parents should spare no effort to figure out how they can help their children to be independent. I hope that in the future the next generation will grow up as mature citizens.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear paragraphing and its willingness to consider several influences on problem-solving ability. Its central position becomes less precise because the introduction minimizes family influence while the conclusion gives nature and nurture equal weight, and some supporting claims remain broad. The priority is to state one consistent degree of agreement and develop each reason with a specific, logically connected example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the comparison and explores relevant influences, but its position shifts and several ideas are only generally supported.
Maintain one explicit degree of agreement from introduction to conclusion and substantiate each main claim with a concrete example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress through distinct, logically ordered paragraphs, although repeated reformulation and the broad conclusion slightly weaken cohesion.
Use more precise referencing between claims and make the conclusion directly synthesize the preceding comparison.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows adequate range for discussing upbringing and personal qualities, with some awkward or imprecise choices such as using unfortunate for poor.
Choose neutral, exact collocations such as low-income families and develop problem-solving skills to improve precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of simple and complex structures is generally controlled, though agreement and word-order errors recur occasionally.
Check subject-verb agreement and natural adverb placement, especially in sentences built around singular subjects such as a child.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
children who are brought up by wealthy parent. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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