The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest?
Sample Response
Technology advances, especially with computers and web, passed many stages to reach many people and become available to everyone including teenagers. However these advances do not come without any costs or disadvantagesany cost and disadvantages. These disadvantagesSuch these advantages could be classified according to their severityclassified to different degrees in their severity and may affect health and time or could affect people's cultures and traditionspeople culture and traditions. Generally people, nowadays, browse the web during their free time. This may involve wasting a lot of their valuable time so they become addictedaddict to it without thinking seriously about their health. Research shows that people sit for long hours in front of computers monitor could suffer from many health problems such as back pain, dry eyes and other joints injuries. I think the most obvious solution is to reducesolution is by reducing the browsing time to the minimum and following a strict schedulerestricted fixed schedule designed to achieve specific tasksabout what to do within aim to achieve specific tasks. Another well-known issue is family based, appears when children and teenager getting to use the web. They could spend many hours in activities like playing online games and browsing inappropriateunsocial websites. This could lead to poorbad performance and behavior at school. Furthermore, they may not be able to complete their homework which could escalatewhich escalated to not attending school. This problem could be overcome by controlling browsing time and access. For exampleexamples, parents could install software such as parental control or implementimplementing access functionality like username and password. Lastly, a familiar problem is facing all businessesbusiness with their employees. They are claiming that most employees who need the internet to do their work spend many hours visiting unnecessary websites and reading unwanted emails. Such anas issue could be solved by an IT departmentby IT department by installing serversserves and proxies that limit access and block unwanted emails. To conclude internet is a very useful technology that give many possibilities to people to use at work, school and home which I think personally should not be misusedshould not misused or overused. Please
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers several relevant internet problems and usually pairs each with a practical solution, giving it a clear underlying line of thought. However, the single-block presentation and frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce clarity and make some explanations awkward. The highest-priority improvement is to rebuild the essay into focused problem-solution paragraphs using shorter, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers both parts with several relevant problems and corresponding solutions, though some explanations remain general or briefly supported.
Develop each problem-solution pair with a more precise explanation of how the proposed measure would work.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of problem-solution pairs is identifiable, but the entire essay forms one block and some linking is mechanical.
Separate the introduction, each major problem-solution pair, and the conclusion into clearly focused paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient topic vocabulary for health, family, and workplace issues, but frequent misselection, word-form errors, and spelling mistakes reduce precision.
Use familiar topic words accurately and verify collocations and word forms during proofreading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied and complex structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and clause construction persist throughout.
Rewrite overloaded sentences as shorter clauses and check the subject, verb, and article in each one.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest?
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