The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work, education, or shopping. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is certainly true that traffic in cities throughout the world todaytoday traffic in cities throughout the world has become a major problem. Thisthis is obvious from the number of vehicles on our roads and the amount of pollution they cause. probably the traffic problem is due to individuals traveling for work, study or shopping purposes, and this is evident in the rush hours we experience every evening and morning.
It is also true that today such daily commuting is not always necessary because people can work, study and shop from homedo these things from home. Wewe can see this in the options that information technology providesoptions information technology gives us today. For instance, remote workfor instance, online work, distance learning, and online shopping servicesshopping facilities are all available via the internet.
However, even if everyone had access to the technology and the opportunity to work from home, it is unrealistic to think that everyone would want to. Eveneven though the technology for working, studying or shopping online makes this possiblemakes this option a possibilityDelete, nevertheless, it would mean that people would haveit would mean people had less freedom of choice and less social contactless social contact in their lives. This would have a significant impactthis would have a large impact on society as a whole.
In conclusion, while working, studying and shopping from home could reducethis practice could reduce the traffic problem in our cities, it is verymost unlikely to be an acceptable solution. Inin terms of other solutions, perhaps we need to think more carefully about improvingfacilitating public transport and limiting private cars in our city centers. Thethe development of public transport that is not road based, such as sky trains or subways, would probably be a more acceptable alternative measure to reduce traffic congestion on our roadsreduce jams on our roads.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear, nuanced position: reducing travel can help, yet it is neither universally acceptable nor the sole solution, and relevant alternatives are offered. Its main limitation is language control, especially repeated failure to capitalize sentence openings and some awkward or redundant phrasing. Prioritize a careful editing pass for sentence boundaries, capitalization, and cleaner concessive structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response maintains a clear qualified disagreement and supports it with relevant discussion of remote activities, personal choice, and transport alternatives.
Develop the public-transport alternative before the conclusion and explain more fully why reducing travel cannot be the only effective approach.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a logical progression from the traffic problem through remote options and objections to a reasoned conclusion.
Integrate the alternative solutions into a dedicated body paragraph so the conclusion synthesizes rather than introduces substantial new material.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows sufficient range for discussing commuting, technology, social contact, and transport, though several combinations are awkward.
Replace imprecise phrases such as options information technology gives us with more natural and specific collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex clauses are used with generally clear meaning, but frequent lowercase sentence openings and some redundant concessive structures reduce control.
Capitalize every sentence opening and avoid combining even though with nevertheless in the same sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work, education, or shopping. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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