Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Sample Response
I think that the issue of whetherthe issue whether all students are required to wear school uniformsuniform is open to debateis the one that is open for debate. Some people think that all students must wear school uniformsmust wear the school uniform. However, others think that students should decide what to wear to school themselves or by their parents. Personally, I believe that students should choose their own clothing.students should wear what they like. For several reasons, which I will mention bellow, I think that school uniforms should not be required to wear at high school level.
First of all, if students are not required to wear school uniformsdo not have school uniforms they can wear what they preferwhat they like to wear. Personally, I like to wear comfortable clothesclothes which are comfortable. Also, I am a womanfemale and I like to wear jeans and shorts, and as far as I know, girlsas far as I know girls must wear skirts as part of their school uniform. I think many female students will agree with me that jeans are much more comfortable than skirts.
SecondlySecond of all, I believe that school uniforms should not cause discomfortuniforms must not cause any discomfort. For example, some international students will find it unacceptable to wear some parts of the uniformsome of the uniform's parts. I am from Russia and when I was a student of the elementary school I was required to wear the school uniform that included a dark blue skirt and a white or light blue shirt. I disliked the fact thatI did not like it very much because I did not like the fact that all students were dressed in the same colour. We dressed the same way and we were permitted to wear accessoriesany adornments. Personally, I did not like the fact that girls always had to wear skirts and they were impracticalit was not convenient, especially in cold weather.
In short, I think that students should wear to school what they want. HoweverOtherwise, if a high school requires students to wear school uniforms, I think that uniforms must be comfortable for all students.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear preference for allowing students to choose their clothes, and its personal examples make the comfort argument easy to understand. Development is narrow and repetitive, with much of the discussion focused on skirts rather than comparing the wider effects of the two policies; strengthen the essay by adding a distinct second reason and explaining how it supports the preferred policy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question with a consistent position and relevant examples, but its reasons are repetitive and only moderately developed.
Add a separate policy-based reason, such as individuality or cost, and develop its consequences with a specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall progression is clear and paragraphing is appropriate, though sequencing devices are mechanical and the second body paragraph circles around the same point.
Organize each body paragraph around a genuinely distinct reason and use logical connections within the explanation rather than formulaic labels.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and meaning remains clear, despite repetition, a spelling error, and several awkward word combinations.
Replace repeated phrases about comfort and wearing clothes with more precise vocabulary about choice, practicality, identity, and school policy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is used with generally clear meaning, but article, preposition, and passive-construction errors recur.
Review noun phrases and passive patterns, especially forms such as the issue of whether and uniforms should not be required.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
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