The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.
Sample Response
The maps illustrateThe chart illustrates the changes that occurredmodification that happened in FrentonFenton from 1990 to 2012. Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that several changesupgrades were observed in Fenton over 22 years. Still, the location of schools, Hospital Cinema and main Road remains the same as compared to the previous map.
In detail, according to the blueprint of Fronton, the West houses were replaced with blocks of flats after 22 years, and one additional block of flats was constructed on the north side of the league, which connected both of them. Moreover, in the middle of Fenton, the café and parkCafe and Park were converted into a hotel and golf course Deletewith the exact dimensions of the Park in 2012. the next bottom of the map in the east-west direction the name of theatre and shops got changed with newer cinema and supermarkets after 12 years.
Furthermore, in the South direction, the High Street remainedgets remains the same, but playing fieldsFields which were covered with trees were replacedgot demolished and new blocks of flatsdepartment blocks of flats connected with the main road, surprisingly, the hospital area was expandedgot extended after 22 years. It is interesting to note that schools remain the same, but the bankthe area of the bank was replaced bygot upgraded and changed with a restaurant in 20122912. moreover, in the boundary of Main Road, the libraryDepartment of the library looked identical and untouched in 2012, but the area of the trees changed into a technoparktaco Park after 22 years.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover nearly all the principal changes and includes useful details about housing, the hotel and golf course, and altered public facilities. However, the overview is vague and partly contradictory, while several labels, dates, and spatial descriptions are inaccurate or unclear. The priority is to build an accurate overview of the dominant redevelopment and then describe each map area with precise labels and controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Many major changes are mentioned, but the overview inaccurately treats the hospital and cinema as unchanged and several details are misstated.
State the broad redevelopment accurately, then verify every facility name, location, and the 22-year period against the maps.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides some organisation, but long overloaded sentences, unclear references, and abrupt sequencing weaken progression.
Group changes by west and east of High Street and use one controlled sentence for each comparison.
Lexical Resource
The response shows some range, but frequent inappropriate or inaccurate choices such as upgrades, league, department, and taco Park obscure map details.
Use the exact map labels and straightforward change verbs such as replaced, converted, expanded, and remained.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles, agreement, and punctuation regularly strain clarity despite some successful complex forms.
Prioritise complete sentences with consistent past-tense verbs and correct clause boundaries.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.
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