Write a letter to your friend, telling him/her about your degree completion and further academic plans. In your letter: - Tell your friend that you have completed your bachelor’s degree. - Explain your plans for further study abroad and any concerns you have. - Ask your friend for help or advice regarding finding a part-time job.
Sample Response
Dear friend, Sending you warm wishes from Pakistan, I hope you're doing well in abroad. I'm really happy to know about your promotion and wishwishing you more success in theyour future. You would be glad to know that I have completed my bachelor's degree and plan to pursueand persue my career in Germany. I was admitted togot an admission in a university in Germanyuniversity of Germany for master’smasters degree program. I am excited to continue my journey as well as to take such a big step of my life although concern on account of funding of university and daily expenses. I have limited amount barely enough to survive and looking for a part time job. I would appreciate your helpsolicited of your support in finding vacanciesto inquire vancancies in nearby stores. It would be a great helpIt contributes great help to my career, andin my career an I willWill sincerely appreciatebe sincerely appreciate your help. Regards, Hafsa
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates the degree completion, study plan, financial concern, and request for help, so its purpose remains clear despite being slightly short. Its main limitation is the high frequency of awkward word choices and incomplete grammatical structures, which makes several sentences difficult to process. The highest-priority improvement is to expand each requested point in separate paragraphs while correcting verb forms, articles, prepositions, and sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter addresses all three bullet points and maintains a friendly purpose, but the study concerns and request for assistance are only briefly developed.
Add specific details about the course, funding shortfall, and the kind of part-time work or advice needed.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a generally logical sequence, although the single-block presentation and awkward connections weaken progression.
Use separate paragraphs for the degree news, overseas plans and concerns, and the request for job-search help.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the main ideas, but frequent spelling errors and unnatural combinations reduce precision and readability.
Replace inaccurate phrases with natural forms such as studying abroad, admitted to a university, and ask about vacancies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some sentence patterns are controlled, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and clause construction sometimes strain meaning.
Build complete sentences with explicit subjects and finite verbs, then proofread agreement and article use throughout.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Write a letter to your friend, telling him/her about your degree completion and further academic plans. In your letter:
- Tell your friend that you have completed your bachelor’s degree.
- Explain your plans for further study abroad and any concerns you have.
- Ask your friend for help or advice regarding finding a part-time job.
Your response
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