You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter: - invite him/her to a public event in your country - describe the public event - explain other plans you have for your friend - when he/she will visit

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Sample Response

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Dear Anila, I hope you're doing great and can write back to me about the things you've been doing these days. I would love to have you withamong us in India, and this coming Republic Day is an excellent opportunity to enjoy a public holiday together. You can fly to India from Kuwait on 24th January and stay24th January, and stay with us for a week or so. Last time you wrote to me that you have paid leave availableyou've available paid vacations that you're planning to take. I think you should take some of ittake it now and visit us. Republic Day in IndiaRepublic Day, in India, honours the date on which the Constitution of India"Constitution of India" came into effect on 26 January 1950, replacing26 January 1950 replacing the Government of India Act (1935) as the governing document of India. On that day, we, as a nation, formally adopted the Constitution as the guiding document and became an independent republic! The main Republic Day celebration is held in the national capital, New Delhi, and this will be a wonderful chance to enjoy the national paradethis is an excellent opportunity to enjoy the national parade and show our respect for the countryshow our respect. I also have several other plans for us. I'll take you to my cousin's graduation ceremonyday, which is on 29th January. On the night of the 31stOn the 31st night, we will have a party where I'll invite our common friends and celebrate togetherwelcome the new year. I'm eagerly waiting to hear that you willwould be able to make it. With love and warm wishes, Diya

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

This is a warm, purposeful invitation that covers the event, visit dates, and additional plans with relevant detail and an appropriate informal tone. Its main weakness is presentation: the ideas run together in one long block, while a few awkward phrases and a questionable New Year reference reduce precision. Organising the invitation, event description, and itinerary into distinct paragraphs should be the first priority.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

The letter clearly fulfils the invitation purpose and addresses every bullet point with relevant detail in a friendly register.

Next step

Make the proposed schedule fully credible by resolving the confusing reference to welcoming the new year on 31 January.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The message progresses from the invitation to the event description and other plans, but the single-block presentation weakens organisation.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for the invitation and dates, the event description, and the additional itinerary.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A good range of vocabulary communicates the event and plans clearly, despite several unnatural collocations.

Next step

Replace phrases such as 'have you among us' and 'available paid vacations' with more natural informal English.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Varied sentence structures are generally well controlled, with only occasional non-impeding errors in agreement, form, and punctuation.

Next step

Proofread auxiliary and pronoun choices, especially constructions such as 'you've available' and 'take it now'.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter:

- invite him/her to a public event in your country

- describe the public event

- explain other plans you have for your friend

- when he/she will visit

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