You would like your child to have a day off from school for a special family celebration. Write a letter to the principal and in your letter: - Describe the family celebration - Say why it’s important for your child to be there - Explain how your child will catch up on the work missed You do NOT need to include addresses. ………………..,
Sample Response
Dear Professor Jones,
I am writing to ask if it would be possible for my daughter to be absent from school on the first Monday of next month. I completely understand that the school has a strict policy regarding absences; however, I hope that, given the circumstances, on this occasion permission could be granted.
I am making this request becauseThe reason for this special request is that her brother is getting married the day before and the wedding is taking place a considerable distance from our hometownquite a distance away from our hometown. This means that we will be travelling back home on the Monday and will not arrive until late in the evening. DeleteObviously, her brother would be very disappointeddevastated and heart-broken if she were unable to attend the weddingthis special family occasion.
As she will be missing a whole day of school, I envisage that there will be classwork to catch up on and this will be done as soon as she returns to school. DeleteAs you know, my daughter is an incredibly conscientious and diligent student and will be keen to be up to dateup-to-date with her studies as soon as possible. I can assure you that missing these classes will not have a detrimental effect on Sarah’s academic progress.
Please contact me if you would like to discuss this further. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
John Smith
Why this response received Band 8.0
This is a polished, appropriately formal request that explains the celebration, the daughter's need to attend, and the plan for missed work in a convincing and well-organised way. The main limitation is that the catch-up arrangement remains somewhat general rather than operationally specific. The highest-priority improvement is to state exactly how the missed classwork will be obtained and completed.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter achieves its purpose, covers every bullet point, and sustains a suitable respectful tone with well-developed supporting detail.
Specify how the daughter will collect assignments or notes and when she will submit the completed work.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear sequence, with each paragraph serving a distinct communicative function and cohesive devices used smoothly.
Keep the catch-up paragraph more tightly focused by placing the practical plan before reassurance about academic progress.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, precise, and well suited to a formal request, with expressions such as conscientious, diligent, and detrimental effect used naturally.
Use slightly less emphatic wording where appropriate so the importance of attendance sounds persuasive without seeming overstated.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex sentence forms is handled accurately, and punctuation supports fluent reading throughout.
For further refinement, reduce occasional heavy sentence openings and favour the most concise available structure.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You would like your child to have a day off from school for a special family celebration. Write a letter to the principal and in your letter:
- Describe the family celebration
- Say why it’s important for your child to be there
- Explain how your child will catch up on the work missed You do NOT need to include addresses. ………………..,
Your response
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