You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Say where you are going - Describe your house - Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house

Same questionCompare 2 different answers (Band 5–8)

Sample Response

1

Dear Sunita Hope youyour are feeling well. As I mentionedHas I have mentioned in my previous letter that I am going to Lahorelahore for further studies, for that I need your help to look after my house. you know my house is by the roadsidein a road side with two floorsfloor. There are two rooms a kitchen a tv lounge and a small car porch is there. The most important thing that you have to do is to check the pipeline when it is rainingwhen its raining, secondly you must check the leak in the bathroom floorfloor leakage of bathroom and last but not the least, you have to waterwatered the only rose plantplant of of rose near the main gate. I hope you can help me with thiswill not disappoint me Best regards, Asmahs

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The letter's clearest strength is that it communicates the destination, basic house details, and several practical duties for the friend. However, it is substantially under length, ideas are thinly developed, and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors reduce fluency and occasionally obscure the intended instruction. The priority is to expand each bullet point with clear, accurate details, organize them into paragraphs, and proofread verb forms and sentence boundaries.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

5.5
Scoring rule

All three bullet points are addressed, but the response is under length, provides limited detail, and ends with an unnecessarily demanding remark.

Next step

Develop the travel plans, house description, and care instructions more fully, and replace the final demand with a friendly expression of thanks.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0
Scoring rule

The information follows a broadly sensible order, but the single block, weak punctuation, and mechanical sequencing make progression uneven.

Next step

Group the destination, house description, and duties into separate paragraphs and use complete sentences to mark each new instruction.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary communicates the main practical ideas, although inaccurate collocations, repetition, and word-form choices frequently weaken precision.

Next step

Use natural phrases such as “beside the road,” “bathroom leak,” and “water the rose plant,” while checking repeated words.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

4.5
Scoring rule

Some simple clauses are understandable, but errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, capitalization, and sentence boundaries occur throughout.

Next step

Prioritize accurate basic sentence patterns and verb forms before attempting longer structures, then proofread every sentence for a clear subject and finite verb.

Put the feedback to work

Write this task while it is fresh

Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.

IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

- Say where you are going

- Describe your house

- Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house

Your response

Words0
20:00

Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.