A growing number of people feel that people should not exploit animals and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
People have different views with regard to animal protection and how animals are usedanimal protection and it is used. While it is believed by some people that humans should not use animals for their own motives, others feel animals are used for various purposes, such as food and medical researchhuman-like eating and medical. In my opinion, animals should not be exploitedanimal exploitation should not be done because this would disrupt the ecological balancedisturb the ecological chain, and they also have aesthetic appeal.
On the one hand, those who justify animal exploitation give the following reasons. First, each animal-based food has distinctive nutritional propertieseveryone has a unique property; if humans use animals for food, like chickens, then it is necessary because one food cannot always replace anotherno one can replace others. No nutritionist can provide a replacement for chicken meatthe replacement of chicken meat for weight gain. For exampleExample, chicken has a high protein contenta property of protein which is useful for weight gain or muscle building. Second, many medical advances can result from experimentsmedical properties can come from experiments on animals. Scientists argueThe scientist said that they do not test any medicine directly on humanson beings directly. Hence, tests on birds and animals are justified.
On the other hand, some feel humans need not use animals for their motives. Firstly, animals play a role in the ecological chainhave an influence on an ecological chain. If animals or birds become extinct because of human exploitationare extinct by human exploitation, then humans are also gone forever. Because everything is connected to each other. For instance, insects are eaten by bats, and if insect populations increaseif insects are increased, then they can destroy cropsit destroys the crop, which would affect humans directly. Second, every animal has aesthetic appeal. They look beautiful and complete their nature with diversity. If those animals disappearSuppose those are gone, then diversity is also lost, which is a hazard to nature. Thus, humans should not exploit animalsbecome exploitative the animal for their own use.
In my opinion, in nature, every birds and animal have equal right, and human has the power to save the earth’s diversity, so they need not an exploitative animal because they have equal emotions a human. So that they need not use for research as other computer-based experimentation options are available.
In conclusion, although some people believe that animals are used for food and research for humans, others feel it is not justifiedworthy. In my view, animals need protection due to their importance in the ecological chain and diversity. It is rightly said that animals are gone, plants are gone, and then, ultimately, humans are gone.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response's strongest feature is its complete structure: it discusses both positions and maintains a clear opinion, supported by several relevant examples. Its main limitation is that some reasoning is simplistic or unclear, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each argument with more convincing logic and express those connections through consistently accurate sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a clear opinion are presented, but several supporting claims are simplistic, questionable, or insufficiently explained.
Develop each main claim through a clear cause-and-effect explanation and use a credible, directly relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical overall structure, although linking is sometimes mechanical and a few fragments or unclear references interrupt progression.
Connect sentences through explicit logical relationships and revise fragments so every point develops smoothly from the preceding one.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations reduce precision.
Prioritize natural collocations for discussing animal rights and check that less common words fit their grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, word forms, and clause construction weaken control.
Edit each sentence for subject-verb agreement, complete clause structure, and accurate noun and adjective forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A growing number of people feel that people should not exploit animals and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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