Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers?
Sample Response
The world has witnessed many rapid changes in almost all areas including education, after the invention of the computer and this tool has become an essential part ofin many new sectors. The education sector is no exception and the modern education system is so deeply rooted in computer and internet technology thatthe computer and internet technology that without these two, modern educationeducations would become meaningless. Who could have thought only 40 years ago that computerscomputer would be used in rural classrooms, modern online based distance education system and in medical colleges? In fact, the modernization in education was possible because of the invention and widespread useuses of the computer and internet technology. From physics to aeronautical engineering, chemistry to modern arts, computers are used everywherecomputers are used in everywhere. A complex chemical reaction can be simulated using a computer, the trainee pilots can simulate the real flight in a computer system and even the students in fine arts can learn the digital arts which are created using computers. The changes in education and useuses of computers have become a common phenomenon nowadays and a school without a computer lab is considered primitiveconsidered a primitive one. Mathematics, physics, chemistry, engineering, medicine, business and commerceMath, Physics, Chemistry, engineering, medical, business & commerce subjects can all be better taught using computers. Even arts subjects can be better taught using computers. Subjects that directly involve computers like computer science, computer engineering, electrical engineering, graphic designgraphics designing etc. cannot be taughtcan’t be conducted without the help of computers.
There are still some aspects of education that require human involvementhuman touches and involvements and can’t be done using a computer. For instance, morality, discipline and responsibility are taughtteaching morality, discipline and responsibility are done by teachers apart from delivering lectures on subject matters and that can’t be done using machines. A student learns many other thingsmany more aspects from the teachers and classmates and that can’t be done using computers. Creativity and leadership qualitiesThe creativity and leadership quality are two other aspects that are nurtured and inspired by humans and machines cannot take responsibilitymachine can’t take responsibilities for these issues. In summary, computers can enhance the scope of better education in almost all of the subjects except teaching some values and moral values in lifemoralities of life that can only be taught by humans.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response directly answers all three questions, maintains a clear position, and supports its claims with relevant examples from several subjects. Its main limitation is that repetition and broad lists replace fuller development in places, while frequent collocation and grammatical errors reduce precision; the highest priority is to organise distinct ideas into focused paragraphs and edit recurring article, number, and preposition errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
All parts of the task are answered clearly, with a consistent position and relevant examples across several educational fields.
Develop fewer examples more fully by explaining exactly how computer use improves learning in each selected subject.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses from the role of computers to their limits, but the two long paragraphs contain repetition and loosely grouped ideas.
Separate the essentiality argument, computer-assisted subjects, and human-taught qualities into focused paragraphs with clearer internal progression.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of education-related vocabulary, though recurring collocation and word-form problems reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as plural abstract nouns and unnatural verb-noun pairings with more idiomatic academic phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used and meaning remains clear, but article, agreement, number, and preposition errors recur.
Proofread systematically for singular-plural agreement, articles, and fixed prepositions, especially in long coordinated sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers?
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