Developing the economy will always damage the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is often asserted that economic progress must always come at the expense of the environmentat the expense of environmental. While this is not the case for establishedentrenched economies, it is true for nations trying to establish themselves in the global marketplacegain a foothold in the global marketplace.
Developed nations generally haveOnly developed nations have the capacity to protectprerogative of protecting the environment without major economic harmbacklash. Examples of this can be foundThe best examples of this can be seen in advanced economies around the world, ranging fromaround the world ranging from Japan and South Korea in Asia to France and Germany in Europe and the UAE and Kuwait in the Middle East. All these nations are already well establishedalready dominant in severalvarious global economic sectors. Germany leads the world in automobile manufacturing and other high-end goods. Japan is famous for its electronics and entertainmententertainments brands. This frees them up to haughtily build more energy efficient factories, tax companies, pass public awareness bans, and regulate pollution far more aggressively than developing nations.
Developing nations have neither the means nor the inclination to protect the environment. Vietnam provides a clear example of thisA good example of this can be seen in Vietnam, which is a rapidly developingevolving, populous nation. Much ofA good deal of itstheir economic growth has come from offshore drilling, which has resulted in oil spills, as well as factories dotting the countryside, which contribute to growing concerns about air pollution. Many people depend on these businesses for their livelihood and the companies are trying to compete with developed nations from a substantial initial competitive disadvantagefrom a huge initial, competitive disadvantage. In order to catch up, theyIn order to catch up they must compromise environmental standardscut environmental corners or risk falling further behind in the global economyfalling further behind globally.
In conclusion, environmental conservation is a privilege for countries that contributed the most to climate change historically. Developed nations ought to make allowances for countries that are still struggling to provide their citizenscitizenry with a decent standard of living.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, nuanced distinction between developed and developing economies and supports it with specific country-based discussion in a logically structured argument. Its main limitation is that some claims are overgeneralised and the conclusion introduces historical responsibility without fully connecting it to the exact question; several ambitious word choices are also imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to qualify the claims and link the conclusion directly to the stated position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear qualified position and develops both sides of its developed-versus-developing distinction, but some sweeping claims and the shifted conclusion limit depth.
Qualify the country-level generalisations and restate explicitly in the conclusion how far economic development necessarily causes environmental damage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses clearly from the thesis through two well-focused body paragraphs to a conclusion, with effective internal sequencing.
Strengthen the final link between the second body paragraph and the conclusion so the last policy point follows directly from the argument.
Lexical Resource
The response displays a wide range of academic and topic-specific vocabulary, although several ambitious choices are inaccurate or unnatural.
Replace imprecise expressions such as entrenched economies, haughtily build, public awareness bans, and entertainments brands with natural equivalents.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex sentences is used with generally strong control, while occasional noun-form, punctuation, and reference errors remain.
Proofread noun forms, modifier placement, and unnecessary commas while retaining the effective variety of sentence structures.
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Developing the economy will always damage the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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