The charts below show the average prices charged by three airlines for flights from Darwin to four cities in Austria in October, 2017 and during the holiday period in December, 2017.
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The two bar charts show the average ticket prices of three airlines, Virgin, Qantas and Jetstar. for routesThese flights fly from Darwin to four Australian cities in October 2017 and the holiday month of Decemberthe holiday month December 2017. Overall, flight prices of all three airlines were higher in the December holiday periodin December holiday period than in October. Qantas generally had the most expensive tickets in both months. In addition, theBesides, the price gap between the two months was the biggest for flights to Brisbane. In October, Qantas charged about 400 Australian dollars for flights to Melbourne, Sydney and Adelaide. Virgin and Jetstar's pricesJetstar’ s prices were around 300 to 370 dollars across these citiessimilar at around 350 dollars for these three cities. By contrast, Virgin flights to Brisbane were the lowest atBrisbane flights were much cheaper, with Virgin costing onlyVirgin only cost roughly 240220 dollars. In December,When it comes to December, all prices roserise greatly. Qantas tickets to Melbourne and Adelaide were just under 650 dollarsclose to 650 dollars. Jetstar's price to Adelaide reached nearly 670 dollars, which was the highest overall figure that monthJetstar’ s price to Brisbane reached around 650 dollars, which was the highest price in this month. Virgin's tickets remainedVirgin’s tickets remain the lowest overall across all four destinations, ranging between roughly 530 and 570 dollars.cheaper than Qantas for all four destinations.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay effectively provides a clear overall overview and logically organizes comparisons between the two months. However, the response includes minor data inaccuracies regarding peak prices and relies on inconsistent verb tenses throughout the reporting. Precision can be improved by carefully verifying data points against the visual and maintaining past tense consistently.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview is presented along with main trends, but there is a minor inaccuracy regarding the highest December figure.
Double-check all comparative peak values against the charts before finalizing data reporting statements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is logical and information moves smoothly from the main summary to individual monthly comparisons.
Vary cohesive markers slightly to avoid overusing simple linking phrases at the start of sentences.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to convey key statistical comparisons and trends clearly.
Incorporate a wider range of precise lexical phrases for describing numerical differences and price comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are varied appropriately, though tense inconsistencies and minor grammatical errors recur.
Ensure consistent past tense usage when describing fixed historical data sets from 2017.