The charts below show the average prices charged by three airlines for flights from Darwin to four cities in Austria in October, 2017 and during the holiday period in December, 2017.
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The two bar charts comparedelineate the average fares charged by three airlines (Virgin, Qantas, and Jetstar)average fees charged by Virgin, Qantas and Jetstar flights departing from Darwin to Melbourne, Sydney, Brisbane and Adelaide , which are four Australian cities, in October and December 2017.which are four cities of Australia in October and December, 2017. Overall, it is obvious that the average prices in December were much higher than those in Octoberprices in December is much higher than that in October across all three airlines and destinationsregarding the same flights and destination cities. In addition, Qantas charged the highest fees in general while Virgin was relativelyrelative cheaper than the other two carriers.than the other flights. In October, the most expensive flight prices were charged by Qantas, costing nearly 450 AUS to Adelaide, followed by 420 AUS to Melbourne,followed by 420 to Melbourne while the fares for flights to Sydney and Brisbane werethe expenditure of flights to Sydney and Brisbane were 400 and 390 AUS respectively. MeanwhileBesides, the average prices charged by Virgin ranged from 230 to 370 AUSfluctuated between 220 and 370 AUS, with Melbourne flights were the most expensive. Over 400 AUS was charged by Jetstar to Brisbane compared to around 280 AUS for Sydney flights.only 390 AUS for Sydney flights In December, the flight prices of all three airlinesflight prices of all three airlines increased across all destinations. Qantas still had high fares, while Jetstar’s prices rose sharply, becoming the most expensive for Brisbane (around 640 AUS) and Adelaide (nearly 670 AUS).becoming the most expensive for Brisbane and Adelaide. Virgin’s tickets also went up, remaining cheaper than Qantas on every route. Overall, all routes saw a price hike from October to December.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay effectively highlights key trends and comparisons between the two months, supported by a clear overview and logical paragraphing. However, grammatical inaccuracies in subject-verb agreement and complex clause structures slightly reduce precision. To improve, ensure consistent grammatical accuracy and include precise numerical data for the second time period rather than relying only on general trends.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features and comparative trends are clearly presented with a accurate overview, though specific numerical values are sparse in the final paragraph.
Include key data points for both months to ensure both charts are fully backed by specific figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organized with clear paragraph divisions based on time periods and a distinct overview.
Vary cohesive markers slightly more to connect individual data points smoothly within detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary is used appropriately to describe price comparisons and changes.
Refine word form selections, such as changing adjectives like relative to adverbs when modifying adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted, but recurring minor errors in agreement and subordinate clauses remain noticeable.
Check subject-verb agreement with plural nouns and ensure prepositional clauses with participle forms are structured correctly.