The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
Sample Response
The two maps illustrateillustrates the changes to Beechwood Farm between 1950 and today.
Overall, Deletewe can see that the footprint of the farm remains largely unchanged after renovation, while the internal layout has been converted to serve more uses than in 1950than 1950. It is noticeable that the area for sheep in 1950 has been replaced by other amenities, and the track inside the farm has been upgraded into roads.
Looking first at the layout of the farm in 1950, toon the northwest of the farm was a highway, crossing a river that surrounded the western and southern sides of the farm. A northwest-to-eastwest-east track with a triangular junctiontriangle-shaped roundabout in the middle splitsplitted the farm into two parts. InOn the southern part, areas for fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables were situated between the western part of the river and the track, and on the eastern side of the roundabout sat the barn, the farmhouse and the area for chickens. Meanwhile, the sheep area occupied the whole northern side of the track.
After the redevelopmentreconstruction, the area for sheep has been replaced and split into two sections: a camping field in the west and solar panels in the east. The tracks havehas also been transformed into roads, with two parking lots attached to both of its endsits both ends respectively. While the areas for fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables remain in the same positionremain the same position and size, a farm shop has been introduced in the fruit trees area, next to the southern side of the internal road. Finally, of the three sections lying in the southeast, the barn has been moved to the south end of the triangle roundabout and given overway to holiday cottages, while the other two have nothaven't been changed.
Why this response received Band 7.5
文章全面且准确地描述了农场地图的主要变化,概述清晰,空间方位和细节对比非常到位。主要的不足在于出现了一些基础的主谓一致和动词变位语法错误。建议下一步重点复核主谓单复数匹配及不规则动词的过去式形式,进一步提升语言准确度。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
文章包含清晰全面的总体概述,精准涵盖了所有主要布局变更与未变元素。
保持现有的全面细节分析,注意对个别特殊形状或特征的描述尽量更加精炼。
连贯与衔接
段落划分逻辑清晰,按时间顺序推进合理,衔接词使用自然顺畅。
继续保持清晰的段落组织结构,可尝试更加多元的时空过渡句式。
词汇资源
准确使用了丰富的地图变化词汇和空间方位表达,词汇量较为充沛。
注意个别固定搭配与语序的精准度,例如避免“its both ends”这类微瑕表述。
语法多样性与准确性
能够熟练运用多种复杂句型,但文章中出现了若干基础的名词单复数与主谓一致错误。
仔细检查主谓一致(如“maps illustrates”和“tracks has”)以及不规则动词变化(如“split”的过去式)。
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
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