The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
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Sample Response
The plans show how the Beechwood Farm site has been redesigned since 1950. Overall, the farm has undergone noticeable changes, including the addition of a camping field, solar panels and various tourist and commercial facilitiesdifferent kinds of important facilities.
Prior to the redesign, in 1950, a large portion of the space in the top right corner of the map was dedicated to sheep farmingin 1950, a large portion of the space was dedicated to sheep farming, in the top right corner of the map. On the opposite side, in the southeastern section , was a barn along with the farmhouse and the chickenchickens coop. Southwest of the central track lay areas designated for fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables. Turning to the present day layout,In the redesigned layout, the sheep farm was entirely replacedwas fully reconstructed and a few essential amenities have been added. This area includes two parking areasspaces, one located near the camping field and the other in front of the solar panels, south of the solar panelsnext to the road. Across from the main thoroughfare, which replaced the unpaved track networkoriginal track, the old barn has been transformed into holiday cottages, while a new, smaller barn has been erectedwhile a smaller barn was built at the southern junction of the access roadsnext to the chicken coop. In addition, a farm shop hasas been added within the fruit tree areanear the fruit trees, Deleteselling a variety of substantial local produce.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response effectively highlights key developments between 1950 and today, offering a clear overview and logical comparisons. Spatial relationships and map features are generally well described using a clear paragraph structure. The main area for improvement lies in refining minor grammatical errors and precise spatial references to maintain full accuracy throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and main features are effectively reported with clear comparisons, though minor directional inaccuracies occur.
Ensure spatial locations such as compass points match the map exactly when locating features like the old barn.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized chronological and spatial paragraphs with effective cohesive devices.
Vary sentence transitions slightly to ensure smooth connections between detailing past layouts and present developments.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map-related vocabulary is used appropriately to describe modifications and additions.
Incorporate a wider variety of specific verbs and phrases describing spatial transformation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is controlled well, despite minor typographical and grammatical slips.
Proofread carefully to eliminate minor tense and spelling errors such as missing auxiliary verbs.