The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
Sample Response
The tabletable graph presentsexplicates the data on children ever borngathered statistics of children born to women aged 40–44 yearsaged from 40-44 years in Australia. The data is given since 1981 and it illustrates the figures of 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006.
Overall, the proportion of women who had given birth to three or more children declined considerablyhad considerably plunged and the proportion of mothers with no children rose in each survey yearmothers who had no children were surged by each year. In 1981, women with four or more children accounted for the largest sharethe utmost four or more infants were born by women at 27.6%with the figures of 27.6% but it plungedit was plunged between 1981 and 1996from the year 1981 to 1996 and finally, it fell to 11.0% in 2006. Similarly, the proportions of womenthe maximum proportion of women who had given birth to three children were 27.4% and 27.0%was 27.4 percent and 27 percent in 1981 and 1986in the year of 1981 and 1986 respectively. The remaining two years were minimal in the birth of three children by the women aged 40-44.
Moreover, a larger proportion of women had two childrentwo children were given birth by more women in 2006 and 1996in the year of 2006 and 1996. The two figures were nearly identicalIt was nearly correlative to each other with the figures of 38.3% and 38.2% while 29% of women had two children29% of two children were given birth by women in the year of 1981. However, childless women’s number upsurged in 1996 and 2006 from 12.8 percent to 15.9% but women with no child plummeted from 9.7 percent to 8.5 percent in the year 1981. In the case of one child, the proportion decreased in the first two years of the given graph then dropped to 7.6 percent in the last year.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is its structured coverage of several family-size categories with many relevant figures and a broadly valid overview of the decline in larger families. Its main limitation is data accuracy: the childless sequence is confused and the one-child category is described as falling when it actually rises. The highest priority is to trace every category chronologically from 1981 to 2006 before selecting comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies the main shift away from larger families and includes useful data, but significant trends for childless women and women with one child are misstated.
Check each row in chronological order and accurately report that both the no-child and one-child proportions rose across the period.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and category grouping create a generally clear progression, although confused references to years and figures weaken some comparisons.
Present each selected category from earliest to latest year and use explicit category names instead of vague references such as "it" or "the remaining years."
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied data vocabulary, but frequent unsuitable choices such as "utmost," "correlative," and "quota" reduce precision.
Use standard table language such as "proportion," "rose," "fell," "similar," and "women with two children."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in passive voice, agreement, articles, and comparison forms make several sentences difficult to follow.
Use women as the grammatical subject, for example "the proportion of women with four or more children fell," and check agreement throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
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