The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Sample Response
The two maps illustrate changes toof the road access to City Hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall, the southern part of the road access changed substantiallyhad been substantially changed, with roundabouts and facilities added. Moreover, a new car park had been added on the eastwest side of the hospital to separate the use of parking areas.
Looking first at the original layout of the road access, on the northern side is the Ring road surrounding the hospital, with its southern edgeegde connected to City Road by a north-south road called Hospital Road. Six bus stops were situated alongsymmetrically sat along both sides of Hospital Road, to the east of which was a car park for both hospital staff and the public.the eastern side of which a car park for both staff of the hospital and public was located.
After the reconstruction by 2010, both ends of Hospital Road were fittedeither of Hospital Road were occupied by a roundabout. The original bus stops were removed, and a bigger bus station was constructed on the west of Hospital Road, connecting to both roundabouts. The car park on the eastern side of Hospital Road served only staff, while a new one for the public was built on the eastern side of the hospital.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay successfully covers all key developments shown in the diagrams, organizing the description logically into clear chronological paragraphs. Its main limitation lies in minor spatial inaccuracies, such as misidentifying directions in the overview, along with tense selection errors. To raise the score further, ensure directional details match the visual data precisely and refine the use of past tenses when describing fixed historical changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response highlights all key structural changes between 2007 and 2010, though the overview misplaces the position of the new public car park on the west instead of the east.
Double-check directional details against the compass rose to prevent self-contradictions between the overview and detail body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and paragraph structure flow logically, separating the description effectively between the 2007 layout and 2010 modifications.
Enhance cohesion by using more natural transitional phrases when contrasting specific spatial elements between the two time periods.
Lexical Resource
A good range of spatial and descriptive vocabulary is used, though there are occasional imprecise word choices such as 'either of Hospital Road'.
Focus on precise phrasing for locations and structural elements, using terms like 'both ends of Hospital Road' instead of 'either'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence structures are attempted with good overall clarity, but there are errors in tense usage such as unnecessary past perfect verbs.
Use simple past tense consistently for describing completed changes between two past dates rather than past perfect forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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