The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
Sample Response
The pie chart and the line graph in combination depict Coca-Cola's regional sales volumesales in different markets and its share price from 1996 to 2001over 4 years, commencing from 1996. Overall, North America, Latin America and Europe were Coca-Cola's largest markets by sales volumebiggest markets in 2000 and the company's share pricethis firm’s share price fluctuated substantiallywildly from 1996 to 2001. The pie chart shows thatAs can be seen from the chart, North America recorded the highest sales volumeNorth Americans consumed the highest units of Coca-Cola’s products and accounted foras this region generated 30.4% of total sales. Following this, Latin America waswas reported to be the second largest market with 25.7% of total sales25.7% sales. On the other hand, Europeans contributed greatly to Coca-Cola’s profits by consuming 20.5% units. Asia, as well as Africa & Middles East, were not successful markets for Coca-Cola due to its low percentages of sales volume in each region (16.4% and 7% respectively). The company's share price wasRegarding the company's share price, it was approximately $38 per share in 1996, the lowest between 1996 and 2001. Next 2 years this brand's trading price at the share market witnessed a significant increase specifically at the end of each year ($70 and $80 respectively) despite a minimal drop to nearly $52 at the beginning of 1998. A marked declineA remarkable slip back occurredcould be seen in the next two years, reaching a low of about $48especially the lowest point of $48 in the middle of 2000. However, the share price then recoveredthis trend changed and climbed back to $60 at the end of 2000 and reached nearly $55 a share in 2001.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response provides a clear overview and accurately reports most regional shares and major share-price movements, using a logical chart-by-chart sequence. Its main limitation is imprecise interpretation, including describing sales as profits, judging smaller regions as unsuccessful, and omitting the total sales volume, while some awkward language reduces precision. Prioritise strictly factual comparisons from the visuals and use simpler, more natural phrasing for changes in share price.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and most key percentages and price movements are accurate, though the total sales volume is omitted and a few interpretations go beyond the visuals.
Include the 17.1-billion-unit total and report regional shares neutrally without converting sales into profits or judging markets as successful.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chart-by-chart ordering and cohesive links make the report easy to follow, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph limits structural clarity.
Separate the overview, regional sales details, and share-price trend into distinct paragraphs with clear internal grouping.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates a broad range of trend and comparison vocabulary, despite several awkward collocations and the error 'Middles East'.
Choose natural expressions such as 'the share price rose', 'fell sharply', and 'accounted for sales', and proofread geographical names.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentences is generally well controlled, although occasional missing articles, prepositions, and awkward constructions reduce fluency.
Edit compressed phrases such as 'Next 2 years' into complete grammatical forms and check reference and agreement in multi-region comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
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