The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
Sample Response
The pie chart and line graph reveal the regional sales distributionglobal sales ratio of Coca-Cola in 2000 and its share price between 1996 and 2001. It is clearIt is apparently seen that North and Latin America together formed the largest marketAmerica was the largest market for this brand and its share price was highest in 1998. According to the pie chart, Coca-Cola sold 17.1 billion unit casescase in 2000in the year 2000 and more than 55% of these sales occurredmore than 55% of this sale was made in North and Latin America. Coca-Cola sold aroundThey sold around 3.45 billion unit casescase in Europe, which was their second-largest regional sales sharesecond largest sales ratio. Asia accounted for around 16% of Coca-Cola salesAsian consumers drank around 16% unit case of Coca-Cola in this year and Africa and the Middle EastAfrican and the Middle Eastern citizens together consumed 7% of the total salessale in 2000. The line graph shows that the company's share priceshare price of this brand was $36 in 1996 and it rose rapidlyit rapidly increased in the following years. Except in the middle of 1997, the price continued to risekept on going up until it reached its peak at around $80 per share in 1998. ThereafterHereafter, the price gradually declined and went below $50 in early 2000. Finally, the share price of Coca-Cola stood at around $60 during the mid-2000.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its accurate coverage of the regional sales distribution and the principal rise, peak, and decline in Coca-Cola’s share price. Its main limitation is that the time-series account ends around mid-2000 and does not report the final 2001 position; the highest-priority improvement is to trace the graph through its endpoint while using precise units and natural sales terminology.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview and accurately selects most key sales shares and price movements, but it omits the final movement to 2001.
Complete the time series by noting the recovery after the 2000 dip and the final price of roughly $55 in 2001.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically ordered from the overview to regional sales and then chronological share-price movements, with clear progression.
Strengthen the final transition by carrying the price description through the chart’s endpoint rather than stopping in 2000.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though phrases such as “sales ratio,” “unit case,” and “Hereafter” are not natural in this context.
Use “sales share,” plural “unit cases,” and “thereafter” or a direct time reference.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is handled effectively, with occasional article, agreement, and singular–plural errors that do not impede meaning.
Proofread quantified noun phrases and references, especially “17.1 billion unit cases” and “these sales.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
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