The graph below shows the number of Computer and Internet users in different Arab countries.
Sample Response
The bar graph shows differencessurprising differences in the level of computer and Internet usediscernment in the Arab world. Overall, the UAE and Kuwait are by far the most computerised countries, and a low levelsdismaying scenario in Egypt, Morocco and Syria is noticeable in terms of the Internet useInternet technology's penetration in the latter countries. The chart showspresent that theThe UAE has over 15% computer users, compared to Kuwait's 13% and Lebanon's 56%. In contrast, countries such as Egypt, Morocco and Syria have no more than 20 computers per 1,000less than 20 computers per 1000 of their citizens. There is also a large disparity in Internet useInternet use and availability among those countries. The UAE has by far the highest proportion of Internet usersnetizens, Internet users, with more than one-third of its population connected to the Internet. Kuwait and Lebanon again rank second and thirdare second and third again, with roughly 10% and 8% of residents10% and 8% users respectively. In some countries the proportionratio of Internet users is negligible. Besides, Saudi Arabia has less than 2% of citizensless than 2% citizens with Internet accessthe internet access and there are fewer than 5 users per thousand in Syria. One noticeable feature is that the connectivity to the Internet does not seem to be directly related to the number of computers citizens own. In countries like the UAE, Lebanon, Jordan and Oman, there are more Internet users than computer users. However, in Kuwait, Saudi Arabia and Syria, the opposite is truethe scenario is opposite.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report’s strongest feature is its broad, mostly accurate comparison of computer and Internet use, including the leading position of the UAE and the differing relationship between the two measures. Its main limitation is precision: it switches between percentages and per-thousand units without explanation and introduces Oman, which is absent from the chart; prioritise consistent units, fully chart-based comparisons, and neutral academic wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies the main extremes and relationships and gives several accurate converted values, but it mixes units and includes the unsupported country Oman.
Use the chart’s per-1,000 unit consistently and ensure every country named appears in the visual.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves clearly from an overview to computer data, Internet data, and a final comparison, although it is presented as one long paragraph.
Separate the overview and the two main comparison groups into distinct paragraphs to make the progression easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
There is a useful range of topic vocabulary, but choices such as “discernment,” “dismaying scenario,” and “the scenario is opposite” are imprecise or unnatural.
Prefer neutral, precise terms such as “computer ownership,” “Internet penetration,” and “the reverse pattern.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures communicates the comparisons clearly, though agreement, article, and preposition errors recur in several sentences.
Edit forms such as “the chart presents,” “less than 2% of citizens,” and “the opposite pattern.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the number of Computer and Internet users in different Arab countries.
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