The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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Sample Response

1

The line chartsgraphs show the changes inshow the correlation between the ownership of three household electrical appliancescommon household electrical devices and the weekly time spent on housework per householdduration of housework done by families in a country between 1920 and 2019.

2

Overall, the household ownership of electrical appliancespossession of electrical items by families in this country significantly increased during the period, whileand as a result, the duration of their weekly housework timerequirement declined substantiallyproportionately.

3

According to the first graph, refrigerators were a owned by only 5% of householdsrare commodity in houses in 1920, but their ownership rose sharply thereafterpresence soared afterwards. Since 1980, all households have owned a refrigeratorevery family in this country owned this device at home. A similar, but much smoother trend can be observed with vacuum cleaners, which were present in only three in ten householdsat only three in ten houses a century ago but are present in all households by 2000now held by 100% of all homes. Lastly, washing machines were owned by 40% of families in 1920 and reached 70% in just four decades. These days, it has remained just below 80%.

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The second line chart indicates a inverse relationshipdirect correlation between the acquisition of essential household appliances and the weekly time spent on houseworkduration of work required to be done at home. Household work duration dropped dramatically from a high 50 hours per week in 1920 to a mere 10 hours per week in 2019.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The response is clearly organised and uses a strong range of language to describe the two related trends, with accurate endpoint figures and a clear overview. Its main limitation is selective detail: the dip in washing-machine ownership and the intermediate housework figures are omitted, while the claim of proportional causation overstates what the charts show. Prioritise fuller, strictly descriptive comparisons across the key years.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

The main trends and endpoint data are accurately identified, but important intermediate features are omitted and a proportional causal relationship is asserted without support.

Next step

Include the washing-machine dip and housework plateau, and describe the association between the charts without claiming causation or proportionality.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5
Scoring rule

Clear paragraphing, logical sequencing and effective referencing make the report easy to follow, with only slight repetition of the correlation framing.

Next step

Vary the transition into the second chart and connect the datasets once in the overview rather than repeating the same relationship.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A broad range of vocabulary conveys trends effectively, though several choices such as 'held by 100% of all homes' and 'housework requirement' are unnatural.

Next step

Use more conventional data-reporting collocations, including 'owned by all households' and 'time spent on housework'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5
Scoring rule

Complex sentences are varied and mostly well controlled, with only occasional agreement, reference and article problems.

Next step

Check pronoun agreement and quantity phrasing, particularly the shift from plural 'washing machines' to singular 'it' and 'a high of 50 hours'.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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