The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
Sample Response
The pie charts compare the proportionratio of holidaymakers from a region who stayed in different types of accommodationwho used different types of lodging in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Overall, the hotel became the primary type of accommodation for the majority of the travellers in 1985 and 2005 despite most of the people’s preference to stay with a friend or relative. According to the illustration, more than half of the holidaymakers from a region stayed in a friend’s or relative’s homea house owned by a friend or relative in 1965. This ratio declined over timeover the time and dropped to 35% and 30%35 and 30 percent in 1985 and 2005. A hotel was a preferred accommodation for 16% of these travellers and with time more holidaymakers started to live in a hotel. In 20052000, more than one-third of visitorsmore than one-third visitors stayed in a hotel. CampingCamping while enjoying holidays was chosen by 15% of peoplechosen by 15% people in 1965 and after two decades it was preferred by 18% of holidaymakers18% holiday seekers. The popularity of camping seems to have decreasedseems like decreased in 2005. Finally, 14% of visitors14% visitors stayed in caravanspicked a caravan as an accommodation in 1965 and this proportiontheir ratio decreased to 10% in two2 decades but doubled in 20052000.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers all four accommodation types and generally tracks the major shifts, with a logical category-by-category progression. Its main weakness is data precision: it calls the hotel share a majority, gives 2000 instead of 2005 twice, and leaves some final figures vague. Prioritise accurate year labels and exact comparative statements, then separate the overview from the details and proofread recurring article and phrasing errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview and coverage of every category are provided, but the hotel is incorrectly called a majority and 2005 is twice reported as 2000.
Check every year and percentage against the charts and state the 2005 camping and caravan figures explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically by accommodation type, although presenting everything in one paragraph weakens the distinction between overview and detail.
Use a separate overview followed by clearly grouped detail paragraphs with more deliberate comparisons.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural, including "ratio," "live in a hotel," and "holiday seekers."
Use precise chart language such as "proportion," "stay in a hotel," and "holidaymakers" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms communicates the trends clearly, but recurring article, plural, and construction errors reduce control.
Proofread noun phrases and verb patterns, especially forms such as "15% of people," "one-third of visitors," and "seems to have decreased."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
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