The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
Sample Response
The pie charts outline the proportionspercentages of holidaymakers from a particular region in terms of their accommodation preferencespreference of accommodation over the 40-year period from 1965 to 2005over a span of four decades, starting from 1965. It is noticeable that people shifted from stayingshifted their tendency to stay with friends or relativesat a friend or relative’s house to staying in hotelsin favour of staying in a hotel. As the charts showAs is given in the illustration, 55% of holidaymakers55% holidaymakers stayed with friends and relatives in 1965 while 16% preferred to stay in hotels. Camping and caravans accounted forwere picked by 15% and 14% respectively that yearin this year for their lodging during their holidays.
After two decades, people who stayed at a relative or friend’s house dropped to 35% while 37% stayed in hotels. Preference forof camping increased by 3 percentage pointsincreased by 3% while caravan use fell by 4 percentage pointscaravan use declined.
Finally, in 2005, a smaller proportion of peoplefewer percentages of people stayed with friends and relatives during their vacation and 38% favoured hotel accommodation. This year camping was their least popularideal option while caravan use doubled compared with 1985caravan’s use doubled than that of 1985.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview of the shift from staying with friends or relatives towards hotels and reports most proportions accurately across the three years. Its main limitation is that several later figures are expressed vaguely, especially the 2005 shares and the 1985 caravan figure, while some collocations sound unnatural. To improve, state those percentages explicitly and use more natural comparison phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate comparisons cover the principal change, although some figures for 1985 and 2005 are omitted or left vague.
Include the missing 1985 caravan share and state the 2005 proportions for friends or relatives, camping, and caravans explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised by year, with clear progression and generally effective referencing and linking.
Make the overview a distinct unit and connect the later-year comparisons without relying mainly on chronological signposts.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied enough for the task, but collocations such as 'shifted their tendency' and 'fewer percentages of people' reduce precision.
Use natural expressions such as 'preferences shifted', 'a smaller proportion', and 'twice the 1985 figure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied sentence structures are generally well controlled, with only occasional article, noun-phrase, and comparative-form errors.
Review articles and comparison structures, especially phrases such as '55% of holidaymakers' and 'double the 1985 proportion'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show the proportion of holidaymakers of one region staying in different types of accommodation in three different years.
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