The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
Sample Response
The bar chart shows the number of incoming flights from eight airlines to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000. Overall, in 2000, Hong Kong received significantly more flights from these airlines than in 1980compared to 1980. In 1980Besides, in 1980, the highest number of flightsthe majority of the flights came from Singapore, whereas in 2000, Singapore Airlines, Malaysia Airlines and Thai AirwaysSingapore, Malaysia and Thai, all three airlines were the major contributors. According to the data, in 1980, 16 flights arrived from Singapore per week. Japan Airlines and Thai airways landed 12 flights. Flights from MalaysiaMalaysian Airlines and Korean Air were marginally lower than Thai, as these airlines each operated 11 weekly flightssent 11 different flights to Hong Kong. Eight Cathay Pacific flights8 Cathey Pacific flights landed in Hong Kong airport and Canadian Air operated the fewest flightsthe least number of flights came from Canada, only two per weekweekly 2 flights only. Interestingly, Dragon Air operated no flightsDragon Air had no presence in 1980. By contrastOn the other hand, in 2000, Singapore, Malaysia and Thai operated the highest numbers of flightssent the highest number of flights to Hong Kong, between 43 and 45 flights per weekaround 44 flights weekly. The number of Japan Airlines flightsThe flight coming from Japan was three times as high as in 1980three times more than what it was in 1980. Besides, the number of incoming Cathey Pacific and Korean Air flights almost doubled. Moreover, weekly 5 flights landed in Hong Kong which departed from Canda. Finally, Hong Kong received 10 flights operated by Dragon Airfrom Dragon Air.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report is strongest in its comprehensive and accurate use of the chart data, including clear comparisons between the two years and useful proportional changes. The main limitation is that the whole response forms one dense paragraph and contains several awkward or imprecise grammatical constructions. The highest-priority improvement is to group the two years into separate detail paragraphs and refine comparisons so airlines, flights, and numerical changes are expressed consistently.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview is clear and nearly every airline is covered with accurate figures or valid comparisons.
Describe Singapore as providing the highest number rather than the majority in 1980, since it did not exceed half of all flights.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a clear year-by-year sequence with effective signposting, but the absence of paragraph divisions makes the report dense.
Place the overview, 1980 details, and 2000 details in separate paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response uses varied comparative and aviation vocabulary, though a few choices and airline names are imprecise.
Use consistent terms such as operated flights and number of weekly flights, and copy all airline names accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences and comparisons are used with some flexibility, but agreement, comparison structure, and word-order errors recur.
Revise comparative clauses and plural references, especially constructions describing flights as double or triple earlier figures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
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