The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
Sample Response
The bar graph shows the number of incoming flights from different airlines to Hong Kong per week in bothin a week both in 1980 and 2000.
Overall, weekly incoming flights to Hong Kong increased significantly over the 20-year periodin 20 years and the majority of these flights came from Thailand, Singapore and Malaysia. According to the illustration, the highest number of flightsthe highest airlifts in a week in Hong Kong camewas from Singapore Airways, accounting for 16accounting 16 different flights in 1980. Japan Airlines and Thai Airways operatedJapanese and Thai Airlines landed 12 flights each to Hong Kong. The numbers of flightsDifferent air flights from Malaysia and Korea were marginally lower than the figure for Thai Airwayslower than that of Thai Airways. Cathay Pacific had 8 flights in a week and the lowestlease number of air voyages to Hong Kong came from Canadian Air, at only two per weekCanadian Air - only 2/week. After two decades, the weekly number of flightsthe weekly flight number from these airways increased considerablyconsiderably went up and the highest total, 45 flights,the highest flights (45) came from Thai Airways, almost four times as high asroughly 4 times higher than that of two decades ago. A similar number of flights came from Malaysian and Singaporean airlines and these flights noticeably rose compared to 1980’s flight number. Interestingly, 10 flights per week came from Dragon Airairways in 2000 and this airline operated no flightsdid not have any flight to Hong Kong in 1980. Flights from Japanese and Korean airways trebled and doubled respectively per week while 5 from Canadian Airs reached Hong Kong per week.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview of the substantial growth in weekly flights and supports it with accurate rankings and comparisons for nearly every airline in both years. Its strongest feature is the detailed, largely reliable coverage of the data; the main limitation is frequently awkward terminology and sentence construction. The priority is to replace forced synonyms with standard chart language and organise the two years into separate detail paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overall increase and leading airlines are accurately identified, and nearly all categories are supported with correct values or proportional comparisons.
Add the exact 2000 figures for Japan and Cathay Pacific while keeping the comparison selective rather than listing every value.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview is clear and the details progress logically from 1980 to 2000, though the dense second paragraph contains all comparisons.
Use one detail paragraph for each year and align airline comparisons in a consistent order.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad range of comparison language, but terms such as 'airlifts', 'air voyages', and 'Canadian Airs' are inappropriate or inaccurate.
Prefer precise expressions such as 'weekly flights', 'services operated by the airline', and the exact airline names shown in the chart.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures conveys the data, but agreement, articles, prepositions, and comparative forms contain recurring errors.
Practise structures such as 'accounting for 16 flights', 'four times as many as', and 'the number of flights from each airline rose'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
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