The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
Sample Response
The diagram showsshows the information about the production and packagingthe packaging and preparation of coffee for sale.
Overall, the process consists ofit can be seen that the given diagram involves 11 steps. The process starts withfrom picking the coffee beans and ends with packingends at pack into jars.
Initially, coffee beans are picked from coffeetheir plants, and then they are dried in the sundried into the sunlight on open groundin the open ground. After drying, the beans are roasted. Before grinding, they are cooled down rapidly. Subsequently, the ground coffeepowder is mixed with hot water, and then strainedand after that, it is strained.
NextIn the following step, the strained mixture is frozen, and then ground againand again it is ground. The powder is drieddried up once more at the penultimate stagein the last step, but this time in a vacuuminto the vacuum. Finally, the dried vacuumed powder is packed into jars. Once they are packed, they are labeled with coffee tags and areget ready for sale.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response follows the process accurately from picking the beans through packing the finished coffee and provides a clear overview of the eleven stages. Its main limitation is slightly under-length treatment combined with several awkward grammatical and lexical forms. The highest priority is to add a little more precise description of the transformations while correcting prepositions and verb patterns used for each stage.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All major stages are presented in the correct sequence with a clear start-to-finish overview, although the response is seven words below the expected minimum.
Meet the word requirement by describing the changes from liquid to frozen material and then to dried coffee more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced and paragraphing clearly separates the overview and stages, with effective chronological linking overall.
Reduce repetitive sequencing phrases and make the relationship between freezing, regrinding, and vacuum drying especially explicit.
Lexical Resource
Relevant process vocabulary is used with some flexibility, but collocations such as 'dried into the sunlight', 'into the vacuum', and 'coffee tags' are inaccurate.
Use natural forms such as 'dried in the sun', 'vacuum-dried', and 'labelled jars'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of passive and complex structures is mostly controlled, though errors in verb complements, prepositions, and reference remain noticeable.
Correct forms such as 'ends with the coffee being packed' and check prepositions and pronoun agreement throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
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