The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
Sample Response
The diagram illustrates the procedure of instant coffee productioncoffee production for sale. The diagram describesDiagram describes the steps involved in preparing coffee for salethe different steps following for the process of preparation for sale.
Overall, the production of coffee consists of 11 steps. Theconsists of 11 steps, and the first step of the process collects the coffee beans and dries them in the presence of sunlight. After that, the beansthese seeds are roastedshould roast and cooledcool rapidly. Once they have cooledOnce it cooled, the beansgrains are groundshould grind and mixedmix with hot water.
The next step is to strain the mixtureis also to be appropriately strained. Otherwise, it is too challenging to make powder. At the next stage, the strained mixture should freeze, and at the same time, it has to be dry in a vacuum. This is the packing stage. The coffee powder can be keptIt can be kept in small jars. Finally, the coffee powder is packed into jars for salepacked into jars, and it is ready to be delivered for sale.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents the production sequence in a generally understandable order and uses several appropriate process terms. Its main limitation is incomplete and sometimes inaccurate coverage: it is under length, does not clearly summarise the linear process, omits grinding the frozen liquid, and confuses vacuum-drying with packing. Add a concise overview and describe all eleven stages in their correct order, using accurate passive forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most broad stages are mentioned, but the overview is weak, the second grinding stage is omitted, vacuum-drying is misrepresented, and the response is slightly under length.
Summarise the process from bean picking to jar packing and include grinding the frozen liquid before vacuum-drying.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response broadly follows the process order and uses paragraphing, but some linking is mechanical or illogical, particularly "Otherwise" and "at the same time".
Organise the stages into clear chronological groups and use sequence markers only where they accurately express the relationship between steps.
Lexical Resource
Relevant process vocabulary such as "roast", "strain", and "vacuum" is used, but range is limited and several word choices or collocations are imprecise.
Use accurate process phrases such as "the beans are roasted", "the mixture is frozen", and "the frozen liquid is ground".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in passive voice, agreement, articles, and verb forms reduce control and sometimes strain comprehension.
Build each stage with a controlled passive structure, using "is/are + past participle" consistently and checking subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
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